Sanctify with flame
Under evenings watchful eye
Nocturne waits with bated breath.
Splendor comes at last
Ever claiming heaven's high.
Twilight ushers in the night.
Author notes
This was by far the hardest thing I have ever had to write...thanks for the challenge and I hope, in the end, I got it right.
A contest entry
- Acrostic Sedokas {edit} by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended March 31, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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You have gotten it right, and I am glad to see you have taken my challenge, as well as the advice I have previouly offered.
I really enjoyed this piece. I think the sun setting is just mesmorizing, and I feel you have captured that essence.
There's only one thing that I didn't catch before. "evenings" needs an apostrophy because it's showing possession. -
The word "evenings" needs an apostrophe before the s.
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In your fifth line, look at "heavan's." If it is to be Heaven, you need to change the second "a" to an "e." If it is to be haven, then, well, you see how I spelled it.
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