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Britney's Haircut or Pro Patria

 

 

 

 

 


Imagine there's no Heaven
It's easy if you try
No hell below us
Above us only sky
 

---John Lennon


 

 

 

 

 

 

Most have died
most of the teachers
most of the sayers
most of the makers
most of the voices
most of the weak
most of the strong
most of the mothers
most of the sisters
most of the children
most of the young
the empty cradle rocking

come I in my new shoes
with silver taps
empty winds on the African plains
two million dead in vietnam
most of the dead have died
and gone
the sea comes creeping up the valley
covering the toes
covering the woes
out of the cradle rocking
most of the dead have died
locking the fires in space
loitering on empty streets
most of the dead have died
and are no more,
most of the players
most of the bridges’ songs.
I’ve crawled in bed with John to weep,
most of the dead have gone
most of the world has passed
empty space
most of the world has grief

empty space
I’ve crawled into bed with John to weep.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Notes: Ancient Tradition of the chant, Whitman of course, the quality of Patti Smith's voice, something of Jim Carrol's -- I don't know.

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  • TV Killer Tim
    July 15, 2007
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    The sea refuses no river no matter how rank. It needs to creep up our valleys and cover these woes


  • Mulefa
    July 15, 2007

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    I love the pictures of them doing the bagism protests. I think I would like to be a bagist. And something to do with the Little Prince apparently bagism was I think and that's one of my favourite stories ever ever. I would like to be a bagist one week and then have a bed in the next week then and bag week then a bed week then a bag week then a bag in a bed week.

    Funny how people like different bits of poom. I think most of the dead have died was one of the best lines and totally disagree with that Vampire below.

    I like chanty pooms.


  • Vampstress
    July 15, 2007
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    Not really sure I get this. "most of the dead have died..." this line confused me, I'd say ALL of the dead have died at least once some many times others reborn to live forever or just an extra moment. Anyway I'm sure there is something in this for someone somewhere as you can tell it was written from the heart. Thanks for sharing your write.
    Peace,
    V.


  • cognitivedistortion
    July 15, 2007
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    I absolutely loved this.
    Reading it was sort of like looking through records and cd's of my fathers for me. The way I read pieces of writing from the covers, and the way they all blend together after awhile. I'm not really sure what I'm talking about, but I really liked this. You def. have talent.


  • Poet of Dreams
    March 19, 2007

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    hmmm very interesting. i am not a fan of modern poetry, not at all, but I can see some inner meaning in some pieces, like this one. most of the dead have died...well as far as I know all of the dead have died, but that's just me, I was scared to click on this because of the title, i was expecting a picture of bald Britney, at least i was pleasantly surprised at a lack of that. interesting poem

    Thanks for Sharing and God Bless
    The Unrequited Writer
    Ben B,

  • PalmettoSky
    March 19, 2007

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    too funny that someone said that they fainted! rotflmao! anyway...not quite sure what to make of this one. I got the feeling that I was supposed to be privvy to a very important mesdsage but it seemed to ramble a bit to me...and I got lost...no reflection on you or your writing, of course...later...kp

  • SavannahNicole
    March 19, 2007
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    I am confused what does this have to do with Brittany's Hair?


  • Mark Witucke
    March 16, 2007

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    chants [like mr walrus' omnibus] can be psychedelic ~ imagine hours of dithyrambic chanting to the wine god or days of dactylic chanting and chanting of ilium or the adventures of the wily one ~ you've captured the spirit of h.s. mauberly in a chant...which i am now going to do again in order to get drunk chasbe


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    March 15, 2007
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    Yes
    By now it was all supposed to be fixed wasn't it.

    Idealism/Reality

    The voices have faded to almost nothing.

    I asked my dad before he died if the world was a better place. He said "No, there's just more gadgets"
    and we've paid the price for them.

    Captain Kangaroo
    R.I.P.


  • Adorable
    March 14, 2007
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    Very awesome, emotional piece.
    I lack the ability to critique your
    work when its this far above mine. :]]
    I love it.
    It's powerful and just... mm. Good.
    I can hear the mourning in the words,
    and I lovelovelove the ending.
    <333

  • Eulb kcalB
    March 14, 2007

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    the word is so caught uP in superfluous jaunts , it seems that every now and then we need a reminder such as this...well written and very thought provoking

    J


  • B Chandler
    March 14, 2007
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    -faints-


  • ca ne fait rien
    March 14, 2007
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    I seem to have lost the ability to make any sort of comments- Most of the ones I have ever done embarrass me now. Just to let you know I passed by and the poem burrowed into one opf those places in my mind where this sort of thing lives and talks to me from time to time.


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    March 14, 2007

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    Extremely powerful lament..the inclusion of that particular image...John and Yoko appear to be pondering about heaven...we, and I mean this in a broad sense of the word, kinda dropped the ball, from those times to now..it's time to pick it up and get back on the field...move over I'm crawling in, too


  • cvillelisa
    March 14, 2007

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    I'd say one of the most personal pieces you've written. Reminds me of Pound's "Commission" only somewhat on the failed end. Though his poem was about Art -- Mr. Pound's art is about This.

    That thing I quoted in my essay about "his message being my message" yeah. Fits.

    Maybe your Wail piece is kind of close to this personal sort of pain.

    If they haven't died in body, we're dying in our ability to fight against the very things killing us. We've had this discussion you and I, about your generation being on Fire, uniting for Change -- and how those very same sold out and are becoming dead/empty of that firey spirit and therefore in turn part of the very killing.

    It takes but one enkindled spirit to start a fire.

    Read that on a t-shirt on a mission trip I was on once. I know I've written here on these AP walls before. And will again. I miss John. We should all crawl into bed with him.

    Would the weeps make a Wail loud enough for anyone to notice?


    Me crazy about you. But you kinda knew that already.


  • NurseChilly gold member
    March 14, 2007

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    People soon forget the tragedies happening all over the world and don't look to their own doorsteps...

    poverty and starvation, poor quality of life, working with bad pay and living on the lash...

    then we wonder why our kids are turing to crime and drugs and booze... when all we do is pontificate along with polititians and the regimes of the masses...

    let us stand up and be counted... into what?? -sheep, lemmings or a voice to be heard??

    gosh... this write made me think

    unusual title too.... Estonia is a place not often talked about, even over here...


  • The Hidden Darkness
    March 13, 2007
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    Forgot to applaud


  • The Hidden Darkness
    March 13, 2007
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    nice

    good work here!!


  • storiesuntold gold member
    March 13, 2007

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    well written here with the loss of the world over and over again why cant we feel the wings of the ones gone as they move about us


  • candy-coated-razors
    March 13, 2007

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    i love all of the great emotion you have a wonderful way with words...keep up the great work!!and good luck to you!!!

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