She embarks on a souls quest, against a minds enemies,
hurt she longs to divest, she faces her darkest memories.
With the journey unknown, she takes a path of a dream,
unfamiliar feelings had grown, to take this souls regime.
Beyond the unfriendly ocean, northbound t'ward desire,
through the constant commotion, searching for the spire.
Where the answers do lay, to a questionable taken path,
to heal this young souls disarray, and rid this minds wrath.
Through the turmoiled water, fighting the wrenching dismay,
the storm did not slaughter, for her heart she did not betray.
Standing upon the northern shore, to sight a vision of dreams,
the place she did quest for, along the glowing crystal streams.
Stretching across golden meadows, a road to her content,
to this place where hope bestows, within her enchantment.
She rose to the enticing light, and released all emotion,
released all contrite, to continue her path with devotion.
A light now shun upon the road, releasing her hearts despair,
shown visions the spirits forebode, of what her soul shall bare.
She embarked on a souls quest, fought her souls pain,
rid her soul of all congest, her powers she shall pertain.
Author notes
Option 3: Peace
A contest entry
- Seekers of Love, Paradise, or Peace by Wandering Spirit.
600 points, ended May 6, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - So You Think You Have Soul?? by Trixie08.
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I liked this piece on the whole. The rhythm and rhyme went together well, none of the rhymes seemed forced and the couplets were a good choice for this type of uplifting fantasy poem. I would, however, suggest you go over it again and proofread it for gramattical and spelling errors. You're missing a bunch of apostrophes. And in the second lind of the second to last stanza you say "bare" when I think you mean to say "bear". 'bare' means empty. Otherwise, I mean, aside from that this was a very good piece. The content is well done, just a few technical things need to be addressed.
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wow this is a truly powerful and beautiful poem filled with emotion and depth. You have woven your words in a way that captivates your readers and leaves them wanting more. Nicely done!
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You are as powerful as "You" think!
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nioce
Very well written little bit here. I especially liked the end of it. You have described a souls quest so well here. Thanks for sharing this brilliant piece. Harmony and Love, Stephanie! -
a very interesting and thought provoking write you have penned,nice flow that made for an easy read.Making the reader enjoy with much delight.Loved the wonderful imagery.My favorite lines were Stretching across golden meadows, a road to her content,
brought such a peaceful feeling.
Blessings
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GREAT POEM I TRULY ENJOYED THIS POEM!!!!!! THIS IS MY FAVORITE PART
Now your hand is in mine
And I cannot let go.
We walk this path together
Hand in hand and side by side.
Your heart pumps blood into mine.
Your blood runs through my veins.
Your words feed my soul.
Your tears run down my face.
Your passion ignites my fire
Your love pours out my heart.
How did that ever happen?
Tell me if you know.
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Wonderful Write
this poem seems to flow freely from your pen, just as the pain echoes through this piece.. beautiful write. -
QUEST NEVER ENDS
A quest will never end in volatile equations.
it will go deeper and deeper into the realms of soul
and equates with the desired goals.
a fine poem thought provoking -
great
very well done.Your word flowed freely and I felt the pain that you were revail to use. Thanks for the rea
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