As all the stars were made for shining
And our moon, to always glow,
So were the tears all made for crying,
So were the stuck made to move on.
As to frighten fears were made for,
And our heart to lead the head,
So we have lived our lives before,
So were our minds made to be read.
As mysteries were made for seeking
And as true love was made to hurt,
So were the eyes all made for blinking,
So was the truth meant to be curt.
And as the river's made for flowing
And the lies, all to seem true,
So the unknown was made for knowing
So I was made for knowing you.
Author notes
I got around this poem a couple of days ago...and some ideas hit me. I replaced the lines I didn't like before, and I absolutely love, love, LOVE this poem now.
I saved the previous version in the poem history.
*Penguins*
I hope this will inspire you to find your purpose in writing poetry once more :-)
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Let me know what you think about "Purposes"
Comments
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This was a fantastic write, the only thing that worries me is that you seem to enter this in a lot of contests. Would you mind entering a second fresh write to accompany this? Just put "purposes. penguins" in your AN and I'll know who you are.
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Definitely, no problem.
I'll bookmark the contest and return with a fresh write
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I like a poet who can put things simply. Be straight-forward and still strong.
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Overall its a good piece, but it would be a little better if you wouldn't use so many filler words. Nice, though.
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i liked your poem but noticed that its won alot of tropies i updated the contest and u might want to read it not being mean i do like your poem when u read my update comment and somethign good will happen =)
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wow this poem is simply inspirational, i really like it a lot O.O
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Ok. I enjoyed this, but I have to say your -ing rhyming words...just...don't mesh to me. The others are fine, but those just dont seem to go well together...does that make sense? I'm not 100% sure how to describe it. I think it is a beautiful piece and I think it has amazing potential. Good job
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i dont know how to describe what exactly i love about this, but i think this is amazing. great writ
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amazing poem.
thanks for entering.
best of luck.
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Simple rhyme but beautifully phrased. You got me thinking nicely and really drew the imagery in well.
Thanks for entering,
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Well, this is certainly a poem that makes you think.
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So I made it to the finalists' list?? THANK YOU!! I can't wait
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Yes you did.
Your Welcome.
And I can't wait either- but I'm picking up the points for the other contests as I go, so if it's a lil slow that's why. lol -
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Well, I am truly looking forward to it, and it's absolutely no problem if you're being a little slow...points are, indeed, the only things that hold us back. Ha-ha!
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I can see why this won the trophies it did. A beautiful message.
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Thank you!! Your comment made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside. Just the way I felt when writing it. Such a nice feeling!! Thanks again!
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Wow. I currently have chills. This was so wonderful. Hands down, you're a finalist.
Thank you so much for entering.
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...Thank you so much! I truly had doubts, I didn't know if you'd like it or not, but I guess that worked out fine. I feel honoured to be on your finalists' list.
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This is a great message!
and write...thanks for entering!
Write on and on!
*PEACE*
Happy New Year!
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this is a really good write.. i am sorry that i am taking so long on the judging of this contest, but i am so bussy with work that i hardly get time to go onto the computer. good luck!!
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Really good poem
I love the rhyme in this
Also it's full of images and wonder
Great Job
Good luck in my contest
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I apologize that you didn't make the finalist list, but you are a great poet! Good luck in the future!
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This was a lovely write. The rhyme is a little off in the first stanza with "And our moon to always glow" and
"So were the stuck made to move on", but other than that the rhyming was great. I also think you could find another word that would fit in better than stuck. Other than what I mentioned above, this was great!
Good luck!
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"So were the stuck made to move on." - I think you could use a better word than "stuck", a good variant I am sure is out there. I would search through a Thesaurus as a suggestion.
I like the last verse, I feel the two above it could be tightened up in the cadence.
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thank you for your wonderful entry in this contest! you are truly talented. points and trophies dont need that to prove it!
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This poem could quite possibly be one of the best I've read in a while. Your entry is greatly appreciated in my contest. Good luck (although I hardly think you need it).
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WOW!!
I love the last stanza, awesome & emotional...
Thnx for entering & Best of luck in the contest.
GloriousGift
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Thank you for your contest submission as well as for following the rules. I agree about from dirt on and have some ideas I wil gladly share with you about this if you remind me AFTER the contest, so I may remain unbiased. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *
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good write hope you do well. thanx for entering ~ria
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Thank you very much for entering this contest. I may add much more of a comment later on since there are so many other submissions.
You may want to keep in mind that I will try to open more of the same contests one after another if I can earn enough feedback to do so which I must say would be truly appreciated. Altogether, I hope this will also give everybody a glimpse at one of you're favorite accomplishments which hopefully in turn inspire them to look at what else you've got. -
This is overall a really good poem. I think that you got your point across and did an amazing job of it. I especially like how you ended it! Keep up the great work. <
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Lil' Sis, this is SO AWESOME! My favorites part was"As all the stars were made for shining
And our moon, to always glow,
So were the tears all made for crying,
So were the stuck made to move on"
Oh, I do have a suggestion. Since you LOVE, LOVE, LOVE revising so much, why do you flip the first or second stanzas? Oh, or you could somehow combine them and then mix them up and add it as a last stanza! That'd be so cool! Anyway, great write! I expect greatness from you little missy and nothing less!
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Vi,you made my day(again)!!! God, you are so talented!I love your style!unlike many others you are not afraid of being simple and so your poems are even more intriguing!you approcah philosophical aspect with honesty and open-heart!truly inspiring indeed!well done,Vi!well done! -
Complexing yet well written
I must admit that I was complexed at this poem but then again rereading it I found it to be written quite well. you wrote quite an interesting poem and its very well penned. good poem all round and well I would only suggest that maybe you explain what you were aiming for in the authors note otherwise I quite enjoyed it. Keep up the good work -
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I must admit I kinda didn't know what I wanted to say, either, in the beginning! But I wanted to point out that as all in the world are made with a purpose, so I was made for knowing that person I was talking about.
Thank you!
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