i have words
written on me
so i won't have to say a thing
you can read me like a book
sometimes
i have ink in my mouth
so when i talk
i can be written down
and remembered by pondering
children
after i am gone
i have lies
spread on me
because the words written
are lies
but my eyes will tell the truth
most of the time
A contest entry
- ***Similar but still different*** I want a poem about YOU by Naridill.
605 points, ended March 18, 2007, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - so pretty much anything by Last Pixie.
300 points, ended June 11, 2007, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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oooo wonderful imagery. its always nice to be remembered. good work.
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"i have ink in my mouth
so when i talk
i can be written down
and remembered by pondering
children
after i am gone"
loved these lines especially. great imagery, awesome wording.
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thank you. your comment is greatly appreciated!
~~Wish Addict
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*hugs jul followed by poke* sorry bout.. hehe lol
anyways this is really really amazing..!!!!
PEN ON JULS... &
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Nice imagery. Creates a strong picture. Well written.
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thank you. i liked this one too.
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*ooberly amazingly mind staggering tacklehug* Whoops, you actually fell, lol
*ignorning my own idiocy...* I loved this. It's really good and you have ahmazing talent.
Not sure why the h was necessary though
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*falls over* owwww...
thanks for the hug/tackle. it was lovely.
and thanks for saying i have talent...and the hug was compleatly necessary...you're kristin. LOVE YOU!!!
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interesting write
enjoyed it -
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thanks. i appreciate the comment.
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"i have lies
spread on me
because the words written
are lies"
That is purely awesomely written!!! Them few lines are truely great.
The power of the poem is very strong. I love it, I love them title and the way you wrote so purely from heart.
Thank you for entering and good luck!!!
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i didn't realize i had to put an option down...ummm...i'll either be "the shadow" cuz it sounds cool...or "free choice". and thanks for the comment.
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