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Imparted portrait of love

Crimson fades gray,
as an empty tear falls
from the cracked canvass
of a pillaged soul.
Frozen by the  damp shadow
of a wilted rose,
in a long forgotten vase.

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  • CherryOnTop
    November 7, 2007
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    A beautiful emotionial post.


  • Dark Whispers
    March 26, 2007

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    "as an empty tear falls" this verse is truly.................... I can't find the right when I do I will tell you. I really enjoyed this poem.

  • AngieMae
    March 24, 2007

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    I like the metaphor of a dying rose to fading love, or did I just imagine that? I love your word choice: cracked, pillaged, damp, wilted, forgotten. They all just gave such a hopeless feeling to this. But, I'm not sure, but I believe canvas only has one "s". Anyways, great job.


  • Samantha Mula
    March 24, 2007
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    Thank You.


  • NeanderthalMan
    March 24, 2007

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    The imagery strengthens the emotions of this poem. A very strong piece, all the prose flows logically and it is well written.


  • A Murderous Lament
    March 13, 2007
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    Awesome.

    I love the imagery in every word. Wonderful for such a short poem..

    A MURDEROUS LAMENT <\33

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