~Simple Elegance~
It can rock your world
Delicate enticements
Juicy excitements
Extreme propensities
Heightened enlightments
Fiery sensations
Fruity formations
Informal formalities
Awe-inspiring realities
Mountainous insights
Wrongs into rights
Loneliness make-overs
Sugar, spice and clover
Lover move over-closer to me
Let me feel outbursts
Hold me when I'm terse
Read me your rhyme and verse
Serve me with honey, leave out the bee
Leave me no longer, Your face I see
Caress my words, surround my thoughts
Tell me again, what life's all about
Make my life simple, plain as can be
But add to it melodies, that I can see
~Simply Elegant~
You are to me
~Simple Elegance~
Just let it be
A contest entry
- Hit Me With Your Best Shot by Quixotically Yours.
300 points, ended May 31, 2007, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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While yawns stretch the morning's eyes
here is a cup of tea to make you happy.
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You mention elegance, and that is the case with this poem...it's simple beauty conveys the basic needs of love, in whatever form that may come...and that last line has such power..."Just let it be." Wonderful when that is true and happens.
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Wonderful, yes, when it all comes together into simple grace
lol
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The first two lines were so dissonant, I just had to read this poem. You have a fiery read on elegance, indeed. A pretty sexy write. Sometimes having someone special IS your idea of elegance.
Enjoyed reading.
~ Joyce
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Fun poem!
Whoa! I like so much of this poem, but this is my favorite part.--->"Read me your rhyme and verse
Serve me with honey, leave out the bee
Leave me no longer, Your face I see
Caress my words, surround my thoughts" I like how the poem is kind of deep but you keep a playful edge on it so it doesn't get too heavy and serious.
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This is really ...
very nicely done.
I wonder if you'd object to my posting it on my blog?
http://poetsporch.blogspot.com
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Why are you ...
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Sure
You're welcomed to do so...surprised at your reaction, however, smile....
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This is a very lovely poem you penned her.
A joy to read.
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Truly a passionate write. We all search for the melody of union, in an attempt to simplify the complexities of what we are. Well done.
Napoet
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Thank you so kindly...this comment stretches me somewhat...thanks
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Once again Well done.
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Thanks Amber, I appreciatelol
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a busy "bee" again pat .. i think you are becoming a word "chef" cooking us up many treats
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lol
I think you are too kind, but, don't stop the music
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a good piece, i was just thinking of honey then and smiled when i read that, the kettle needs to be boiling here, honey tea for breakfast
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There's something about when you mention the word -Kettle-
Makes me think of England or something. It's a loaded word for me, I guess. Thanks for this review, lol and have a most outstanding holiday, and don't forget your tea. -
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lol i am english
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ha ha ha
Perhaps that explains it then. Pay me no mind, lots of things blow over my head. Look, do you guys have cobble stone streets? I am fascinated with England and France. Will be visiting there one day after I conquer my fear of flight -
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the street that i grew up in was a cobbled stone street, my house was right next door to a rag and bone type yard lol - truly, we called it knot's yard. there are still cobbled streets here today but not as many as there used to be.
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Wow. This was utterly fantastic. I was completely blown away by this; the alliteration, the gorgeous rhyme scheme, the flowing words. Absolutely stunning. Thank you for entering this, and good luck!
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Thank you
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