You say
Your sorry
I say
It's ok
You say
You love me
I say
I love you to
You treat me like a rag doll
Used and abused
I'm never quite good enough
At least not for you
I have given up
On this battle for you
You say
Your sorry
I say
Yeah right
You say
You love me
I say
Love bites
Author notes
This by far is not my best, I was bored and just started to write...
A contest entry
- YAY 200 POEMS WRITTEN ON AP BY ME!!! by zhaniswolf.
375 points, ended May 31, 2007, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
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i think this poem really shows what love can be like if you're not paying attention to it. I think this is really good.
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If not your best earned you 2 silver trophies, then I'd be amazed to see what your very best is... Very lovely. A couple of spelling mistakes (your=you're) but otherwise very nice and definitely powerful.
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A nice twist, I like the partial repetition of most of the poem, it's very effective. I can almost imagine the 2 people having this conversation, best of luck
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Awesome poem. I enjoyed it! Thanks for entering and good luck!
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Awww
this is really deep. Short yet deep. If this is something you have really experienced i'm sory. But whether it is or not, it flows really well, so kudos
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i liked it 
thanks for entering it in my contest. good luck and best wishes!
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So simple, but so painful and straight-forward. Well done.
Best of luck and thanks for entering! -
something screwed up. i don't think you got any points for getting silver cuz i didn't fully know the system and somehow you didn't get points. i will try to find a way to give you 75 points. my apologies.
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may not be your best, but i like it. it's very true and pronounces a feeling many have felt after being used and abused by the one they love. it shouldn't be that way, but as you say, "Love bites".
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different
I enjoyed reading this write. Very short and to the point, yet made perfect sence. I believe what you spoke on is exactly how it seems to go when your in that kind of relationship. The first few I'm sorrys we except, then from there they mean nothing. Anyway, I connected with this write. I will read more of your work.
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i like this u tell a story aswell as saying what's ture.
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laughs.... ok I shouldn laugh.. but that was good... and I had to laugh..cause its truth
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it's always good to stick it to the man.
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kewlness
This was really good. I like how each stanza expresses different feelings. I like the stanza:
You treat me like a rag doll, Used and abused. This one is a great metaphor or simile (one or the other). Anyway great job and great write!!! -
awww sweetheart, this still holds powerful emotion in it which makes it count. I've been here before. I know the feeling you described very well here. Don't ever give up on love! I did for a while there anyway
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lynnkte
that is terrific i wish i could say those things like that
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