a conspiracy between thoughts and heart
weighing heavy upon my soul
diagnosed weaving puzzled art
random gibberish I console
as I burnish the books upon my desk
Author notes
burnish - to make shiny or polish
5 lines for contest rules.
don't ask me why it says I wrote six lines
maybe it counts the pic. not sure.
thanks for this contest, very unique
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie by Hadji Murad.
300 points, ended April 6, 2007, 28 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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AHHHHHH this is amazing. It's deep, ambiguous and profoundly beautiful in an almost macabre manner. You have penned such a lovely piece of poetry that has captured the essence of beauty in only five lines. I commend you for this piece.
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Dear Son,
Wow, you can say a lot in a few lines.
Great Job!!!!!!! I know you will be selected in this contest. Love You,
Mom xoxo -
Brillant!
Our emotions conspire against us and try to kill us all day long. I die daily. When I finally die out to self, I may not be considered to be human, and be called un-emotional- cold. That's ok because then God can work His work through me! Pure unconditional love has no part in human emotion. Of course these are only my thoughts. Thanks for sharing.
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Uncle Tim
Oh what can I honestly say about this most wonderful piece of writing...I haven't read any of your work in such a long time and I have missed your creations...
This was very well written and it is not always to capture emotions with mere words but you did an excellent job
Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
Love ya
Your Niece
Tes
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Feelings often often aren't easily caught in words. The human language at our command simply is not suitable to express the nature and magnitude of our emotions. There is no explaining what cannot be said. Perhaps poetry is all we have to reflect some of what goes on deep inside us. Thank you my friend for creating and sharing. I spend more time on this page to ponder your words than would perhaps be expected at first glance. I guess such is the essence of the power of emotions. Take care,
Chris
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Ah! Converging the twosome:
reason and emotion -- the challange of every Muse. Now, Tim, how well you labeled this: emotional frenzy. Don't we all know the feeling!
This is what I call reation poetry: reason and emotion merged.
Good luck in the contest.
Love
Myra
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Wow, I impressed by this...humm, a weaver of words, you are!
LL
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With in the few lines that you wrote, I have to say that you have said alot. There is alot of emotion and thought in this write. I wish you the very best in the contest hun.
Much love I send,
Tammy
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Hmm.
Well, it sure is different. I really liked the vocabulary you used here, such as diagnosed and weaving, good words that go underappreciated.
I really like this =)
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Been There.
this was well written and truly enjoyed... been there but without burning books..'
Yvonne -
Magnificent-
Magnificent verse You have penned my Friend
Powerful words in just five lines~
Imagine there are many who could relate
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Missed Your presence~~
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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timothy, you always so such powerful words in these short contests. me, i am too long winded to do so. good luck in this contest and it is good to read something from you. miss you. viyanna rosemarie
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BEAUTIFUL... trying to figure it all out dear one... I think you are right, it is a conspiracy sweetie... your words and thoughts penned to perfection! All the best in the contest... I'm so happy you are writing again! Thank you for sharing your heart! Much love to your dearest "UNIT", Annie
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Wow!
Thank is very good for five lines and what a beautiful girl in the picture. Good luck Tim.
Jim
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Really nice, I love the abstract!
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Rhyme
Sometimes rhyme gets on my nerve unless it is filled with substance and metaphor like this one. It only takes me reading once to get the feel of someones poetry. This is excellent.
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great five lines and i love that word- burnish.the line that reads"a conspiracy beyween thoughts and heart."that's one for the books.in that one line you have sealed your fate as the one and only poeticweaver,master of weaving words. my best to you in the contest.
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Very well done, sweetie! You met this challenge quite well! Wishing you all the best!
Love,
Sandy
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