Angels with disguises
And women dressed in black
Put the world together
while never looking back
The future becomes your enemy
and the past becomes your friend
while murderers kill the innocent
and worlds refuse to spin
Take the words I'm saying
And turn them into song
The dream won't last forever
with the waters rushing on
Don't try to understand me
You'll get lost inside my mind
Just keep your door left open
And don't get left behind
There is one thing you should notice
in the world that you call home
I'm always here beside you
So you will never be alone
Author notes
I wrote this with a lot on my mind and it came out like you see it here. I hope that the message within the art will show itself. Have fun searching...
This is Option #3.
A contest entry
- Anything Contest by PrettyxoxPoison.
300 points, ended April 10, 2007, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - &&; through the hour glass, she said "hello." by animated lies.
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Honorable mention
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I thought this was very good. The rhyming and flow of this is nice and your word choice is not complex, although I ask of you to please put your option number into the author note. Thank you and good luck in my contest.
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I really really like this poem. The depth is clearly visible. The first eight lines are great and are the highlight of the poem to me. If your other works are of the same quality, youve definently found a fan
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Well my freind. I write from my soul and whatever comes out is what you get. I have been told that my other works are just as good but I'm my own worst critic.....
Thank you for your comment....
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Wow This one really got me thinking about my life. I love the lines: "There is one thing you should notice
in the world that you call home
I'm always here beside you
So you will never be alone" It made a perfect ending!! I saw a spelling mistake: line 6- "freind" should be "friend" remember to use the spell checker!! Anyways amazing job overwell!
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I really like this peom, it makes ya think
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Wow, this is wonderful. So many thoughts pouring out at once, I love it. It's just great! "Don't try to understand me, you'll get lost in my mind" Those two are my favorite lines. You've done a great job here.
Laila
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I like this one as well. I like the contrast between the poem and the last four lines. It makes me think of a friend who is troubled by the harsh world, but they fail to realize that they have a wonderful friend right next to them. The most beautiful things can be found under our noses.
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Beautiful
I adore this one it is really thought provoking and personal thanks for sharing ..... I don't need to search anymore -
Often when i read poems that have rhymes, they tend to be corny.
But you did a very good job!
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WOW!?! You did a great good. This is a great piece, I love it. Keep it up. ^_^
Unfaithfully Your's
Of Blood and Tears
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This is awesome! Its one thing to make a poem rhyme perfectly, and another to get a message across. I love how you used your words and played on "door left open" and "left behind." Keep it up!
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great write ....vary deep but good .. i liked this one alot... it was different but in a good way... keep up the good work..!
Caycee♥
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"The future becomes your enemy
and the past becomes your friend"
How true is this. This seems very reminiscent of our conversation last night.You are too worried about the future. Romeo and Juliet both are stressing over whether or not they are going to have to choose the sweet tea or the wine and you need to let it go. I'm happy things are getting better. "do not worry about tomorrow for tomorrow will worry about itself. I don't think this made any chronological, coherent sense but I am typing at the speed of light right now. I love y'all! -
Lee, This piece is amazing. I know we are not speaking but i will always read your poetry. This piece was written very beautifully. i am very pleased to say i actaully like this even though i am pissed at you. You said this poem was about nothing but with a lot of meaning. i love the last line in this piece, " so you will never be alone" i have remembered what you said " no matter what you are never alone" you are right......but you have a beautiful piece of work here lee christian great work
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wow this was amazing. i love this. I think it's one of your best. i'm actually commenting on this for once. i haven't been commenting lately. this is a good poem. great job and keep writing.
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