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sipping sweet melodies
of the rhythmic fall,
raclette blossoms cherish
the revisited exuberance
of nostalgic rain.
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A contest entry
- Quickie by Hadji Murad.
300 points, ended April 6, 2007, 28 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - biggest contest in allpoetry history! (i hope) need 1,000 entries!! by Gasp.
1300 points, ended July 11, 2007, 638 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Raven Qualifier - Romance: Love, Fantasy and Passion by Raven Contest.
450 points, ended May 11, 117 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Really nostalgic.
The pole star among many stars in the horizon of your heart's feelings.Hearing "sweet melodies of the rhythmic fall" of "nostalgic rain" through your words I became so pleased that persuaded me to write this comment for your "rain". -
you know, i love your work - you ahve such a great vocabulary, i wish more your age would be the same alas they are not - ah the rain, just had it whiplashing me before, i had to buy bread and stuff lol it was an agoraphobic's nightmare
but made easier with beer.
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A good short poem.
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short, but beautiful
Awesome job!
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It’s nice to see you start the poem with alliteration, continued with a metaphor. Most writers almost miss the opportunity to start a poem with such a strong poetical devise. Remember the saying music to my ears? Well you have clearly paid tribute to this saying by introducing musical visual aids into the flow of your poem.
I am however confused by the meaning of raclette, do you mean the Swiss soft cheese?
The overall meaning of the poem in my eyes flows as follows
You are going back in time rekindling an old romance, remembering those hurtful and heart rending moments yet feeling content with the newly surfaced emotions. They always say never go back to an ex, but within these words you are clearly giving sanction to the concept of eternal love.
Overall, I like the poem. I feel it’s strong both in character and poetical devises, increasing ones imagination. I was confused by raclette though!!
Well done and thank you for entering the 2007 raven contest, I wish you the very best of luck
Moonlight raven
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this has wonderful wording, a great description of rain, the flow is great, with alot of imagery in such few words.. well done!!!
thank you for entering my contest and good luck..
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wow, great words in this!!! the alliteration really adds something even though it's subtle. you used some really good descriptive words that combined together to make a beautiful poem. good luck!!
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Awesome
Very indepth imagey, thanks for sharing, well done, and congrates on placing in this contest! Keep up the great works, peace, Timothy
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This is remarkably gorgeous. It's so sweet and delicate. The poignancy of this poem is astounding, but it's ambiguous enough to provide this wonderful depth that I truly admire. Amazing job and thank you for entering this brilliant piece. Best of luck.
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you have a lovely way with words, this is very beautiful, good luck in the contest
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Thanxx for the comment. Well appreciated.
Luv,
Candy
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This is sweet
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Thanxx for the comment. Well appreciated.
Luv,
Candy
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wow
BIG words sissy! let me get my dictionary and get back to you with a comment
rock on! good luck and all in the contest that this is entered in.
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Thanxx for the comment. Well appreciated.
Luv,
Candy
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Such a big vocabulary! (I don't even know what some of these words mean, myself. ) Good luck in the contest and never cease to amaze me!
Peace out!
Cassie
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Thanxx for the comment. Well appreciated.
Luv,
Candy
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As I have often said, you've never failed to amaze me. This is beautiful. The touch, the outcome, the voice of rain just shines brightly and so calmly. Fantastic work!
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Thanxx for the comment. Well appreciated.
Luv,
Candy
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well wrote my dear daughter good luck in the contest xxx mommy xxx
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Thanxx for the comment. Well appreciated.
Luv,
Candy
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Beautiful
well spoken and the movement of the verse can be felt throughout the read. Well done .
*Go with God* my friend,
Valerie
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Thanxx for the comment. Well appreciated.
Luv,
Candy
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