slipping away, don't know why.
i need a place, time to die.
close my eyes, what do i see.
blackness closing in on me.
time to leave, time to go.
i want to stay, i can't though.
to much pain, to much hate.
one day i'll do something not right.
i'll hurt a loved one, family or friend.
i don't want to do that.
thats not how it will end.
i would rather die by my own hands.
then by a strager with no life plans.
so this is goodbye, forever and always.
i hope to see you again someday.
goodbye, forever, always, and a day.
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A contest entry
- Picture Inspired. by A Murderous Lament.
380 points, ended March 15, 2007, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow great write. Hits the reader hard with emothion
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Brilliant
This was absolutely amazing. Congrats on the trophy, it is well deserved.
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You had me in tears.....
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OMG.
This is amazing
I totally love it.
All I need is for you to put what picture goes with it
Awesome job I really love it!!!
A MURDEROUS LAMENT <\33
Do that and you'll be a finalist. -
This is really good, i like it, tis well done and i like the rhyming and meaning behind it. All the best.
Peace -
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well thank you
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yup very good! very talented.. i like it!
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rhyme was good.. i liked the thought behind, kind of.. i have no partic reason to die but i don't want to live. i relate. good write, few spelling mistakes but thats easily sorted.
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this is really good
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stay abit longer,like your new name
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lol i'll try and thanx
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