For once in a while.
I let out a smile.
For I am agile.
in awhile.
I'll write about a smile.
A contest entry
- Quickie by Hadji Murad.
300 points, ended April 6, 2007, 28 entries
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Dont comment unless you really want to its a little weird
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This is nice but I really didn't feel too much with it. Sorry but the rhyming just doesn't work and really hinders the poem. Rhyming is a very complicated element of poetry and requires a great skill to do just right. Simple words just don't work. Sorry. I really enjoyed the theme though.
The theme was exceptional and yes...but the rhyme really detaches the poem. Sorry. 
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nice
smiles... great choice of a topic. something positive... i needed that
jennifer -
And so did I, (let out a smile) good one
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Silly but cool. I don't know how else to comment.
Cassie
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Nice rhyming and a nice message as well. Nicely penned, good luck in the contest.
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haha pefect...shoulda read this one first...great rhyming!
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