She sees the light coming forth
The ringing she hears
A bang goes off over the night
Saddening thoughts she and I see
Hearts will be broken on this night
Heaven will open new gates
I feel the blood flow over my hands
I see the pain shoot forth
My heart is ringing as she falls
Dead to the ground
Through night and day
Now you'll see
That to say this is hard
For she is me and I am she
A contest entry
- The Victims Eyes by vanderner.
500 points, ended April 10, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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That to say this is hard
For she is me and I am she
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This was a very nice piece and very imaginative, yes I know my spelling is appauling but I dont care, thanks for entering my contest and I wish you luck!
P.S Giant Monkeys state, why shoot some one else when you can shoot yourself in the foot?!?! -
I Like!
I've been shot a few times and you really captured the feeling in this poem. When I was shot it was like I can see myself being shot. It happens so fast but yet it moves in slow motion. I can relate to this poem and the message it is giving. You are a good writer.
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I have one just like it I did don't have it with me at the moment, but i'm going to put it up hope everyone likes that one to!
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