Share my heart
let it beat as your own.
Feel the love
your wounded soul to surround.
Rain on me your tears
like broken strand of pearls.
I am the one
in which you can hide
all the fears
you battle with inside.
Give to me your darkness
I'll give to you my light.
Leave behind
the memories of sorrow
that restrain
the freedom of tomorrow.
Our paths might lead to seperate ways,
but I will never leave you.
A contest entry
- BLESSEDANGEL CRAVES INSPIRATION!!!! by JoyfulWriter.
525 points, ended March 19, 2007, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - In love or lust? by Myjoy.
450 points, ended April 3, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - What Is Passion? by 2lullabyhaven.
425 points, ended July 5, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow, kind of deep, wouldn't you say? thanks for entering it into my contest, such lovely comments you have received thus far, congratts on that as well...
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lullaby, 'deep' to say the least. I was born on the same day as Rodin and model my life after his statue, The Thinker for obviousl reason
Joe
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Rain on me your tears
like broken strand of pearls.
that stanza is amazing well done on your bronze utterly deserved may i add this is an excellent poem with very cleverly crafted words well done i love this amazing poem xxx
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Laura, too many broken hearts makes most of us too cautious and so we miss out on the love being given. As for the one in this verse, we know that above all we are friends and if God chooses, we sahll become more
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Very pretty. This is a great and wonderful tribute to love. WEll said.
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Kiera, this poem is to friend who, like me, wants to "in love' but has been recently hurt and is afraid to trust again
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this is a very beautiful poem. nice job and keep up the good work.
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Alliane, I hope now you see a more realistic me--like us all I hve two sides but in my case I try to make them work as one without conflict
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ever i do see that and if u read my poems you would mostly see darkness but there is a lil ray of hope.
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WOW..This is and was a delight to read...I love this writing style...It's softer and more sensual...Most lovely hun..
Love..Dusty
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Dusty, I rarely speak from my heart on these pages but this time I couldn't hold back. Now I wonder if I've said too much???
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This was great my friend, all the best in your contest
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Deceits, glad to give you a reason to smile. IM the next time you sign in
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This is definitely one of the better ones I have read of yours ... it is simple and yet extremely profound - I truly enjoyed this one immensely! There is a definite line between loving somebody and being in love with somebody and I think u have captured both aspects here ...
Can't really choose one specific part of this poem that I preferred to the rest - every stanza is really good - BRAVO - I loved this one!
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s-pet, you have gotten the complete picture from this write--the reality is that the timing here is not the best so I have to try my best to be patient and let her make the next move
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Beautiful write. Touches the sopul deeply.
Gives tears to my eyes
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bergetti, this is what one feels and gives to another to illustrate there could be more to share if the timeing is right and eqaully shared
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Beautiful write. I liked the part of darkness and light the best. What a beautiful concept of giving light to someone's darkness, almost like giving someone hope who feels like there may be no hope left in their world. Good luck in the contest.
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Arzab, 'people so seldomly say, "I love you" that love dies or it soon goes'> Being in love right now would be bad timing on my part, but what I feel is very strong
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Most awesomely and beautifully written! Very well done! I wish you all the very best in the contest!
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Heavenly, it's not often i exprees my feelings like this but I could not be totally silent anymore
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... You changed my heartbeat with this one... so beautiful darling... To say I love it would be a horrible understatement. Thanks for pointing this out to me dear.
Yvonne
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Yvonne, now you see the "real me"--a die hard romantic in the fashion of Cyrano
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So very beautiful indeed! I love seeing this side of you....sometimes too wonderful to behold. Thanks for entering my contest. Good luck! Smiles, Terry
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Terry, as you know with me it's more about the message than the trophy. And, I like this side of me, too. It's closer to the truth of who I really am
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beautiful. I love this side of you....Makes me melt in your hands
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Crystal, this a time where I feel something much stronger than friendship but cannot say "I love you" There is love but the "in" part, I too fear
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