Ignorance of unraveled mysticisms impose
indecent proposals for barbarian musical repose!
The noise of cut...mut...makes the wedges unbind.
Axed not the landscapes but the vertical mind!
Uncourteous revelations testify reasons of defiance
mortared the polybians, amphibians and Homo sapians
Lost in the midst of chaos, commotion and nuisance,
The jittered monuments of Adam's littered Innocence!
A contest entry
- 24 hours - INNOCENCE by misselaineous.
300 points, ended March 18, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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ah, the original loss of innocence
i found this quite a clever juxtaposition between the bible and science but personally the rhymed couplet you have used is not preference... i am very much a freewrite freestyler
But you have used internal rhyme well, polybian, amphibian,
and jittered, littered - very applaudable!
You are clearly a very skilled poet and i thank you for entering my contest
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