The essence of Beauty -alone in her
cell, all that's surrounding her blossoms
so well. The dew of the morning is her ball and
chain- for her wingspan has suffered the burden of
pain. Her losses ensnare her- a web of
silk threads. Spiders encircle her spirit- she
dreads what the cards read- her future is clear.
To break free is vital- let the past disappear.
Author notes
Option 3- rhyme
A contest entry
- It's all about the mystery, life is! by S2ndQueen.
450 points, ended April 20, 2007, 35 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - She's Everything You're Not by Exodus.
1050 points, ended April 27, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very beautiful written about the butterfly.
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I have to say this is certainly a very interesting rhyme structure, and not one I have seen before.
It is nice to see people thinking outside the square (or in this case, end line rhyme). I was impressed by the writing itself, the sentences were in no way forced (it seems to happen with a lot of rhyme) and it all flowed very nicely. I must say I'm impressed ^_^
Thank you for entering and best of luck
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this is really amazing! what a wonderful way you have structured it, a very powerful write, and rhymed very well, a nice change from the typical end line rhyming
congrats on the gold, you really deserved it
lucy
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Indeed WOW!
Very short but very short sweet and very effective. i love it. The rhythem is great, it flows soo very well. its soo simple yet grasps the reader with fantastic imagery. such fantastic emotion too. Thank you for sharing this great piece i love it.
I too have written a piece for this contest and have used the same picture, and i find it so interesting and amazine how we all seem to have such different ideas from such a beautiful image.
Good luck
Jules1
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Wow-
What an emotional verse You have penned I imagine that many could relate to
Powerful images~
Loved this one~~
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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So, I was trying to make notes on all of the entries, but not to post the comments until I had read them all, alas, I have failed.
I love this.
Alot.
Ill leave a more in depth critique at a later time, but I couldnt pass without applauding.
S2
The Queen
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