does it make you crazy-
knowing you let me walk away?
That I still hold my head high
and you sit there alone and cry?
Does it make you crazy-
knowing Im moving on,
Realizing what you coulda had
but now its gone?
Baby does it make you crazy-
Is it driving you mad,
knowing Im the only one
Im your universe, Im your sun
And now its darkness,
darkness for you,
while you yearn for me
hunny thats why the sky is blue.
It lost its sun,
just like you.
Author notes
poetic movement
A contest entry
- NEO SOUL: POETIC MOVEMENT PT. 2 by cgirl0410.
400 points, ended March 20, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Dont know if it works...
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I know the feeling you asked about in this poem and I know it well. This write is seems to be aimed at a particular person and it also seems to be a kinda in-your-face type thing, but it is really well written and I enjoyed reading it. This emotion brings back negative feelings but you described it well.
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i like the way the poem fits together very well writen.
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cute..the rhyme could flow a bit better, but I really like the thoughts expressed and the wording. wish you well in the contest.
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i love the sun/universe metaphor. this is a really good piece, and very relateable. great write.
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this is really really good. i like it a lot. it very different and that why i like. i loved it all
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Nice piece. Thanks for entering! Good luck in the contest.
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