she stands there listening as they frame her,
longing to speak her mind.
but every word she goes to speak,
gets left behind.
walking down a street of dread,
for which she doesn't belong.
blaming her for everything,
when it was them all along.
she crys for they do not realise,
she is free from sin and moral wrong.
still she is kicked out on the streets,
for way to long.
her tears are made from guiltlessness,
for it is shown by how she looks.
pale and fragile she be,
one glance is all it took.
eyes of blue,
hair of gold that shines so bright.
braided all the way down her back,
a curl on the end fits just right.
skinny legs and a face of beauty,
sits with a look of sadness.
in a beatiful dress covered in flowers,
who knows if she will get through it.
A contest entry
- 24 hours - INNOCENCE by misselaineous.
300 points, ended March 18, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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nice work pickles
good write julie. this shows frustration, anger, and a hidden pain that you held inside yourself, but you know you have to let it out eventually.
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Wow Julie this is excellent
I am very impressed by the way you have thought about this and how you made it flow. What a very common message you have sent out. Blame is often mis-directed. Well Done
Gaga
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there are some nice ideas here but you seem to have forced some rhymes that have detracted from the overall feel of the poem.
And some serious typos
beautiful not beatiful
way to long - should be 'too long'...
please use spellcheck when you enter contests - it means you don't get the wrong side of the judge before you start.
elaine
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