When you smile I watch the movement
Emotion creased in your perfect skin
The smile that I long to be for me
It never is; It can't be
You don't even know me
But you find enjoyment so easily
I know I could make you smile
Open your eyes and see the girl
Who watches you in the crowd
Who doesn't stand out; who isn't exceptional
Except for the feeling in her eyes
Just give me the chance
Let me enter your heart and explore
I don't need a map; only you as a guide
If you make me, I'll find my own way
My life depends upon it, upon you
Every moment I see you is another moment
I continue to breath
I've seen you in every state of emotion
Your deepest depression; your highest elation
I stand by and try to live in them all
But it's all just pretend and make-believe
If I write the story of our love
If you don't collaborate
It's just a fantasy, no meaning
Except to me
Obsession
The word isn't strong enough to describe
Everything I feel for you
The depths of my emotion
Can't be put into words
Words degrade the meaning
Of my undying love
Author notes
Written about my pathetic Jack O'Neill obsession.
In a list
A contest entry
- Secret Obsessions by HisBreathlessDream.
1050 points, ended March 13, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Something... Meaningful by Mister Casanova.
400 points, ended March 15, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Amazing, It's stong and hold emotion.
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'Emotion creased in your perfect skin' alright! Capture the smile in artistic form!
'But you find enjoyment so easily' hmm... simple minds need simple pleasures.
Isn't Jack O'Neill one of those guys on Stargate? (actor)
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Oh, by the way...
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Congratulations!
Ultimately, this poem was the one that I was looking for. Congratulations, and I would love to read more poems from you! -
Wonderfully Amazing
I loved this poem. I love the way you speak about the true nature of obsession. Many people tend to look down upon it as childish and not real. But if they only knew how real it is, and how hard it is to 'draw the line.' I loved this poem, and I wish you the best of luck.
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very beautiful and intense. Thank you for the wonderful read and for following the rules.
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