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You're a suicide makeover [bby;;bby;; roll me over, this side's done]

I swallowed your liquid lies,
chasing vodka with cancer stick and swallowing pills like hard candy.
With every word you said [DANGERDANGER] flashed in my mind;;
bruising my bones and placing violet butterflies on my thighs.

Your tangerine rain glared angrily at my hair,
trickling down from the glitzy sky,
and screaming "w h o r e" at my plastic skirt and bleeding lips.
Cracking silver against the pavement and strutting to the hospital,
telling them "I've fallen down again",
and feeling the poke of the needle jab in my shimmering skin.

Your glamorous lies cascaded around me,
breaking glitter memories into pretty razors in my mind.
You told me you loved me, but darling I know you were lying.
I'd collapse on the curb in my fermaldahyde-state-of-mind,
catonic and barely breathing as I convulsed against the rainbow oil spills.
[And you w a l k e d a w a y]
as I lay puking up my love for you in the pot holes.

Afterwards you kissed me blowing smoke into my mouth,
and giving me a chance to escape on a temporary happiness.
You liked to tear off my clothes and leave me behind the dumpster,
streaky lines of blood smeared across the bricks behind my battered shiny head.

Snapping bright flash pictures of my scars,
laughing at the remnants of abuse trickling down my cheeks.
You held onto me tightly as I sucked up that line of snow[snowwhite]
and fed me the poison apple while you bit my tongue to keep me from screaming.

I wandered across the lawn,
collapsing beneath the sprinklers and you l.a.u.g.h.e.d;;
telling me "Hey baby, you look great in nothing."
While I hid myself behind the bushes, trying not to breathe.

My ribs were taped and my collar bone fixed,
&& the wishes you inflicted upon my spine are clouded over.
You were the [WORST] thing for me,
and the marks engraved in my shoulder blades can prove it.

So, S.w.e.e.t.i.e,









[f-f-fuck you]







Author notes

Username= Tinkerbell-Or-Me
Option= Dirty Pretty

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I hope this is allright bbs.♥

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Baby doll;; you're one step away from [suicide] && you're the perfect makeover♥

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  • silver-X-lining gold member
    October 2, 2007

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    Love this... harsh, graphic, beautiful. This *is* dirty-pretty, in all senses. I thought that the best were the first three stanzas, though the last two lines also drew the close to perfection. So well done, poet...

    ~QoA


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    August 16, 2007

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    Such a harsh way to treat someone... Very graphic, but this kind of shit does go down and I can't help but pity those who have to go through it. No matter what they do, who they sleep with or what life they live, nobody deserves to be treated this way, I don't care what others say, this is how I think and feel and I can't say otherwise. Beautifully written.


  • EliaNinja
    August 7, 2007

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    You were the [WORST] thing for me,
    and the marks engraved in my shoulder blades can prove it.

    As always, you amaze me. ♥


  • AshliiAsphyxiation
    June 20, 2007

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    whoa whoa whoa whoa

    AHHmazing dolly, like.. whoa!!

    thank you oh so much for entering dolly!!!

    xoxoxo


  • Nephlim
    March 14, 2007

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    Whoa
    Wow
    Awowesome
    This is gruesome and so sarcastic, but at the same time it has that emotion flowing from every word, and such great imaging - great used loosely, very bad, but also very good for a writer to be able to do- and the end, i almost laughed and cheered
    GREAT job
    diggin it majorly


  • Porcelain Princess
    March 13, 2007
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    Now, this is dirrty-pretty. Great work, hunny. Lots of luck.


  • makeout kid
    March 13, 2007

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    this is gorgeous.
    this was dirttty/pretty shining in perfection.
    amazing, honey.
    your words are painstakingly beautiful.
    && i lovelovelove you.
    ♥

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