I can feel
the nights cold air,
beating against
my body.
The darkness of
the night surrounds us all,
Like a protective shield
as we walk alone.
And with every minute
that strikes the clock,
the night grows darker
and we walk farther,
Into the
wonders of the night.
With the stars
above our heads,
and the moon shining
down on the street.
The night
protects us,
like a protective shield,
leaving us to walk alone.
Author notes
Someone said to me "broden your horizons"..write different things into my poetry. So I suppose you can say this is a start..I'm very unsure of this write though, it's not very me to do such a piece, but I figured I may as well try.
A contest entry
- Prewrite " SPECIAL" by wingsofgold25.
450 points, ended May 17, 2007, 123 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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very nice write...good luck in the contest!
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good job
You did a good job with this Good Luck in the Contest. -
this was a great piece which worked really well and had great descriptive parts to it. i really loved the protective shield part, but the second time it was used it seemed a little repetitive. i really liked the beginning and the end mostly because they did a great job in not just bringing in the reader, but also ending the piece. great write
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thank you very much. i may go back and still work on it, but not sure. thank you much though
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