Your tree tried to push you away
when October rolled around.
But I waited eagerly for you
to slowly spiral down
into my open branches,
my accepting arms
that wanted nothing more
than a bright orange leaf
to call their own.
my outstretched fingers
attached quite unwillingly
to my arm that reached up high
and stood towering like a tree.
A tree too still, too quiet it seems
for you simply drifted by me
and fell to the grass,
just a flash of orange
that outshined the sun
and then you flew straight past.
I fell backwards to the ground
and as I blew through the breeze
I was met by piled yellow leaves
that cordially caught me
and I landed soft inside them
with a heartfelt sigh of relief
and turned over and intently searched
for just one elusive leaf.
your skin was dry
but I really didn't mind
Because I laid my head against it
and it softened mine.
My bark so tough
is broken by the thinnest things
some fragile Autumn Leaves
that I could hear softly sing
as they ruffled my hair
they rose up from everywhere
and like the clouds conceal the sun
to give it time to rest,
so they enclosed me in their loving bodies
to give me a place to lay my burdened head.
Author notes
Obsession and Love, where is the line drawn?
A contest entry
- Secret Obsessions by HisBreathlessDream.
1050 points, ended March 13, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very beautiful write.
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beautiful metaphor. I've never seen it done quite this way before. This was filled with beautiful images. I could see an orange leaf spiriling toward the ground and getting caught in a branch..cradeled there softly. Nice job.
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fall colours
The verse exresses the beauty of autumn season and its colours in plenty.
The imagination of the poet in viewing the leaves singing softly is a nice view -
this is amazing. excellent imagery. i felt like i was really there. great write!
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Work of absolute beauty i loved the read. Thank you for the entry and for follwing the rules!!!
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Beautiful write. It drew me from one line to the next I really did enjoy this it had wonderful flow and rythm Thank you for sharing this with us it was very good.
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I love the symbolism in this piece and the passion. Well crafted. Did you mean "burdened" in the last line? - joanne
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thanks for the correction
yes that's what I meant to write, thanks for reading.
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my outstretched fingers
attached quite unwillingly
to my arm that reached up high
and stood towering like a tree.
A tree too still, too quiet it seems
for you simply drifted by me
and fell to the grass,
just a flash of orange
that outshined the sun
and then you flew straight past.
I fell backwards to the ground
and as I blew through the breeze
I was met by piled yellow leaves
that cordially caught me
and I landed soft inside them
with a heartfelt sigh of relief
and turned over and intently searched
for just one elusive leaf.
very cool poem. thank you for sharing. keep up the great work. peace! -
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I liked this, and if I am interpreting it right, then I can relate. Good job...
<3
Syd
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