Really, I'm pretty much everything you don't want to hear
Try-to-hard-funny is what i do best
Uplifting, religious?
You bet
Can at least say no to the rest
Rape/molestation, not me, but my friends
They seemed drawn to me, the ones with lost souls
They hand me their hearts to mend
You want the truth?
You want to know what I'm hiding?
Why not? I don't know you,
What's the point in lying?
I smile to make them happy
I convince myself i am too
I'm the biggest hypocrate you've ever known
Never do what I say, never say what I do
I hide my imperfection flawlessly
They really believe I've got it all
Masks and lies cover my insecurities
They'll be surprised when I fall
Truth is this,
I'm not your damned savior
I'm not anything at all
Author notes
perhaps the most emo thing i've ever writtin...sucks that it's all true...
A contest entry
- Who Are You... Tell me. by Lj-.
350 points, ended March 16, 2007, 18 entries
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Hi Blair, Your poem was very truthful, I like that. I think we all have our masks on that hide parts of our thoughts and lives. You remind me of me when I was younger. Smiling on the outside and crying on the inside. Now I let my sadness and the real me come out in my poetry. Keep writing. Your talent shines through this poem. Take care, Sandy
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I like it. Very realistic and one can feel the truth in it.
Very nice.
Thank you for your entry,
Best of luck!
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It does suck. Not your best. I am dissapointed. The title is so misleading.It is pretty emo. Mabey, this relates to someone else better. I Don't know. It didnt hit me like some of your others. -
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guess it was a mistake to write what i was feeling. it almost seems like your in denial there buddy. you kinda made the whole poem make sense.
My friends see me as more perfect than i am. if i dare slip out the mask for two seconds, you ignore it. it MUST relate to someone else. thanks, rich. -
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well.. mabey it was just better to lie. Thats what friends do right? Lie? You would love to think denial.I am SOOOOO sorry that I cant be like everyone else and just fall at your feet all the time. I thought we had a mutual respect to always be honest with each others writtings. This is like the 3rd 4th poem about how ppl look for you for guidance and how they think your are soooo perfect. Woo Hoo.. But, thats fine. I will save u the trouble and not comment and let you be fooled by this whole facade of how nice everyone is on here. oh. I don't think your perfect.- richard
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it was just the whole,"Mabey, this relates to someone else better." like i don't know myself. I know i get kinda repetitive about the whole thing. it's just that its really difficult, constantly trying not to dissappoint ppl. i play along with the "perfection" gig cuz I hate making ppl dissappointed in me. Which explains why it hurt so much, when you said it.
But i'm glad you don't think I'm perfect. it means i can be real with you. but i don't want to dissappoint you, and it seems that what this poem did...b/c i was being myself... -
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you should always be real. if ppl are dissapointed in you so what. you arent god. I am no more perfect than you. I dont care what ppl think of me. you shouldnt care what I think. I meant with mabey this relates better to someone else that its just something I havent really experienced. I didnt mean the poem didnt fit you. I am sure it does.
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AWESOME !
Well done. You have a great entry here and I know what you mean by not something you usually do. Good luck in the contest
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