i’ll be residing over a sliver moon
&& granting your shooting.star.wishes
[un]true
these eyes are holding secrets you can’t even touch
[not even close, darling]
&& my tongue is stumbling over words
[words that could change e v e r y t h i n g]
he stole the glamour from my broken smile.
&& dared me to shine as imperfection.
[but even still,
you saw the stardust in my eyes]
i am sailing upon moonbeams
| slipping between the headlines of your dreams |
i’ll be the belle of this masquerade
-with suicidal tendencies-
((the clock strikes midnight && this is the tragic ending))
[i never was much of a cinderella, anyway]
|| holly.wood scars || engraved in the ivory of my carved hipbones
[holding on to what shred of perfection is left]
i’m [re]writing fairytales (in glitter) across my collarbone
[Sleeping Beauty never wakes up
Beauty is the Beast
&& Snow White slits her pretty little teenage wrists]
((trust me,
happy endings are soso overrated.))
he tore my paper heart
&& dared me to keep beating to the rhythm (his shoes made as he walked out of my life)
[but even still,
you swore i’d be your paper.x.doll]
i am the image stitched upon the inside of your eyelids
(whispering lullabies in the form of hypnosis)
i have spent the night dancing
| beneath a glass moon && sequin stars |
i am nestled in (cotton.candy) clouds
&& raining soft spoken secrets upon this chemical Neverland.
[candy.coated.thunderstorms && fading neon rainbows]
my halo burnt out (when he slid that goodbye kiss into the pocket of my jeans)
&& torn wings won’t carry this skeletal frame
(but he dared me to soar)
[[stitch.stitch.stitch the rest of your world upon my bruised fingertips]]
| i’ll fingerpaint you a masterpiece (in the sky) |
Author notes
♥
StarshinexEyes
A contest entry
- rainbow flavored condoms♥ by DarlingUnwrapMexx.
550 points, ended March 15, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
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Silver trophy winner
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Gold trophy winner
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love me. or leave me.
Comments
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Dude, I lovelovelovelovelove this poem! When I read it before I really had nothing to say, because I just didn't know where to start. This is beautiful, albeit a bit long, but it captures you the whole way, instead of dragging on. Each stanza was beautiful, everything just dripped with sadness and sarcasm, and I loved it. Great job.
|| holly.wood scars || engraved in the ivory of my carved hipbones
that was amazing. pure and simple. Lovely, thanks for entering!
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interesting style~
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I have to admit that when I first looked at it I was worried because of the length but once I started reading I really got into it. Everything you write is perfect(ly tragic). I have to say that two parts in particular caught my attention;
"[Sleeping Beauty never wakes up
Beauty is the Beast
&& Snow White slits her pretty little teenage wrists]"
(I think everyone knows I have a thing with fairy tales and this was just [gore]geous.
The other line was;
"i am the image stitched upon the inside of your eyelids". I'm not even sure what it was about this line that got to me but boy did it ever!
I'm sorry I've taken so long getting to you, but best of luck and thank you for entering doll.
Oh as a suggestion, in the third stanza you have "word" in the first line and second, but it isn't necessary in the second. Good luck babe
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<3
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wow this bit really got to me
"i’m [re]writing fairytales (in glitter) across my collarbone
[Sleeping Beauty never wakes up
Beauty is the Beast
&& Snow White slits her pretty little teenage wrists]"
thats amazing.
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oh bbbydollface, this is gor.gous. i lovelovelove it to.the.core.&&.back.
my halo burnt out (when he slid that goodbye kiss into the pocket of my jeans)
&& torn wings won’t carry this skeletal frame
(but he dared me to soar)
[[stitch.stitch.stitch the rest of your world upon my bruised fingertips]]
| i’ll fingerpaint you a masterpiece (in the sky) |
this stanza was the best and most amaz.ing. great job, keep up the fantasmic work hunny. -
hey babyy;;
this is absoulutly what im looking for.
thanks doll;;
best of luck;; -
This is one of my favorite poems that I've read of this genre. So many favorite lines, I won't even begin. But, definitely bookmarking and applauding.
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mm babe even better then the last one ♥ i luv yoru poems they remindf me of..me x]
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This is definitely your style of writing (yes, that is a bit delayed).
"dared me to shine as imperfection"
--fascinating line.
"i am the image stitched upon the inside of your eyelids
(whispering lullabies in the form of hypnosis)"
--I like the little inserts of artfully dark lines you add in your pieces. I feel comfortable there.
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mmm i like this! i dont believe in fairy tales either to be honest xp once youve gotten scrwed over one tp many times you kinda give up! luv it ♥
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it won't let me give you 3 more
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oops
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you get six♥
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new favoritefavoritefavoriteee I FUCKING ADORE THIS.
OMGOMGOMG.
You continue to amaze me bby.
*copy/paste whole poem here*
i love youuuuuuuuuu<333333
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Where are these contests?
It seems that all the good contests are hidden from me, and the ones I DO enter throw me out over (Content). It's enough to make one a dark poet. (Wait a minute... I AM a dark poet!)
Anyway... I like your use of skulking imagery. It does my brain good.
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first of all I lovelovelove the title. Second, this entire poem was so full of heartbreak and breathtaking beauty that it literally killed me a little.
((trust me,
happy endings are soso overrated.))
Those lines are soooo true and I'm so glad that someone was finally able to place it in a poem in a noncliche way. This entire poem was genuis. Amazingggg job<3
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Great googly moogly.
You never stop amazing me.
And thats what i love about you doll. ♥
You better win in those contests!
~Princess of Shadows~ -
i’m [re]writing fairytales (in glitter) across my collarbone
[Sleeping Beauty never wakes up
Beauty is the Beast
&& Snow White slits her pretty little teenage wrists]
((trust me,
happy endings are soso overrated.))
i love this part && these words
are what i'm looking for
thank you for entering
&& good luck =]
♥
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