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Hooked

Hooked with one piece of the puzzle
999 pieces left to boot
One slither did it for me
Now, I am gone like the wind

Didn't need a whole ocean
One half cup was enough, indeed
Look my heart is pulsating
Being now on auto-feed

How did you take one sentence
And ride into my heart
And not only did you enter
But you became a permanent part

There's no turning back now
Innocence is forever sprung
Now embarked we are en journey
Hope that you enjoy the flight

For I couldn't resist you now
Were I to try with all my might
Yes you took words of a sentence
And you spoke them with such ease

And now all my mouth can utter
Is.."Don't stop, don't stop, please"
And, please don't do damage
To a heart that's true to you

Please remember to tread softly
As I'm often thinking of you
Don't abuse the privilege
Afforded you here today

You may never again conquer
Or, conquer in quite the same way. 

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  • Dlvvanzor
    October 15, 2007

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    Awww... that was sweet... The 'don't stop' etc was awesome. Great write!

    Thanks for entering,
    -Dlvvanzor


  • Procrastination
    May 26, 2007

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    'And now all my mouth can utter
    Is.."Don't stop, don't stop, please"
    And, please don't do damage
    To a heart that's true to you'
    I liked that verse very much, perhaps because I'm a dirty minded teenager, but none the less I liked it very much.
    Goodluck in the contest.
    Emily x