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A much needed revenge.

I'm only seventeen,
and I don't claim to be wise,
but I know how I feel.
I know what it's like to cry.

I've dealt with more
than most kids my age.
I don't want your pity
but your debts must be paid.

You took from me
the one thing I held dear.
Stole from me my rights
and left me there in fear.

Trust no longer lives
inside this shattered heart.
Now I'm here to finish
what you just had to start.

I'm here to let you know
that it won't happen again.
No more will I be pushed around.
What you've started, I will end.

No longer will I die inside
knowing you roam free,
and NEVER will you hurt another
in the way that you hurt me.

Author notes

In taking revenge, a man is even with his enemy, but in passing it over, he is superior.

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  • Perfect-Pain
    October 16, 2008
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    And a well articulated revenge at that.
    Thank you for entering.


  • Heavens Child
    September 3, 2007

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    This reminds me of something I was told onece, 'the best act of revenge is to live your life on purpose.' The person who hurt derives no satisfaction from what they've done. Anger is a very powerful emotion, that can be turned and used for driving one to succeed. This is a powerful write. The only awkward part is the last line of verse four, the rhythm slips there. The rest flows with perfection. Thank you for the entry in my contest.


  • she still smiles x gold member
    July 9, 2007

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    breathtaking!!!!

    congratulations on being a winner in the contest! :] you are a phenomenal writer! i could definitely relate to this poem by a lot. the very last verse is my favorite, especially the last two lines; it has tons of emotion and a sense of power and a feel that YOU'RE in control, not the other person for once. you're in control of yourself, i mean. AMAZING write! thanks for inspiring me! :] keep it up. hope we can become friends!

    <3 bria


  • Cavca
    May 13, 2007

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    I like it. That's wonderful. It was completely vague so that you're left wondering what happened. The rhyme wasn't forced. I didn't even notice it until half way through. And your meter only stumbled once. Good luck in my contest.


  • XHollowXEyesX
    April 8, 2007

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    Dido

    once again this is an awesome write. I truly love reading this piece, I can feel the intense emotions and anger. dido on what I last wrote : )
    thanks for entering and goodluck


    • Angierie
      April 9, 2007
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      ooops.. didn't even think. Sorry I entered the same poem in two of your contests!! lol


  • Nereida Nightshade
    March 28, 2007

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    I like this is dark and full of pain I just need to know what option you choose? This a great poem that speaks volumes. Thanks for entering and good luck!!!

  • XHollowXEyesX
    March 26, 2007
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    awesome

    this is an absolutely amazing write. so powerful and the emotions run so strong and deep. I love the meaning and anger is so deadly. I can relate to this in so many ways. you are a very strong person to stand up the person that hurt you so much.
    thanks for entering and goodluck

  • Pietro456
    March 18, 2007

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    Excellent !

    Wow so young to have so much life experience ! But that's what makes a good poet the Great Bard always said. You have to feel you're poetry in you're gut.
    Keep up the great work.


  • Crazy-Baby
    March 13, 2007
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    i really like this poem, its realy well written and i can relate to it. thanx x


  • Jeff.W
    March 12, 2007
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    that sounds like something that happened to my sister
    cool


  • lucy sky-diamond
    March 12, 2007

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    so powerful, an even morbid and evil feel to it, very impressive write

    expertly rhymed, i wish you luck in the contest


  • Whyitt U
    March 12, 2007

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    Oh, this is good...so full of anger and pain...even hate I would say. What a wonderful, emotional dark write!! Well Done!!!

    Wyatt xoxox


  • okadadokie
    March 12, 2007

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    Yay for the darkness. I can feel pain and anger in this poem. Wonderful. I fall helpless to anything dark, twisted or demented. *shivers* Good luck.
    ~Oka

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