I walk down the hallway, blackened rose in hand
Creeping silently, I don’t make a sound
My breath pours out raggedly in the dim amber light
I hear a muffled snore from the door to the left
Walking in, I gasp to find
A blood-red coffin, black lace curtains flapping in the wind
Creeping silently across the dusty floor
I slip out the stake wedged in my sleeve [among the pills and dollar bills]
I open the lid and to my surprise, I find you sleeping softly, sanity unwind
Screaming, I run down the hallway, my rose dropping to the floor
You tricked me, you fooled me, right until the end...
'doesn't really rhyme or anything....just read it...
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perfect
i love it. i can only say perfect. thiers no better word. you have a masterpice here. the title fits this work like a glove. keep writeing.
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this is awesome, i loved it, the title fitted it nicely, keep writing!!!!
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This is just neat. I really like the format it's written in. It's very unique.
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Who cares if it rhymes it's so awesome thanx 4 sharing
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Great, i love the Pills and dollar bills line, a little rhyme amongst the madness *Evil Laugh*
Brilliant
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Nice one dark, but enjoyable
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hehe. i like it! i like it a lot! no i LOVE it! haha. these is great, i love the darkness in your poetry. <3 ! [i see you took my advice! yay!]
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