simplicity deserves notice
in the present moment
the future, a dream
of this dream-
life
waves crash on rock
erodes to sand
creates the beach
sometimes still,
the leaves will blow
anyway
Please tell me what you think
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beautiful
I really liked this poem series but these poems do not all follow the haiku form of 5,7,5. Overall the poem was exellent though you should revise the title so that it is not listed as a haiku series. Keep up the good work. -
The present is where we need to station ourselves and our minds.. sometimes that is so hard to do.. we are all dreamers at heart.
Love the deeper meaning in here. Wonderfully done!
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well it is not strictly all haiku, is what i think! the second section in particular is not dealing with nature - but what do i know of poetry!
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you don't think life is a part of nature?
but, I agree - it isn't all 'traditional' haiku. I don't usually write traditional haiku.
thanks for reading.
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I like this. It's a really clever, poised and simple poem. Which I guess is the point...
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I have a line in a poem not posted here
The waves pound rocks into sand
Where one may take long walks
And in time,
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Hey look! Comments!
This one is much more easier to understand, and I like the passage of time you have illustrated here.
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I adore the ending... really good.
Nice to read you again :-)
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This was a very enjoyable read. I love your metaphors and the ending is the finale.(So true)
TD
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this is very refreshing to read
wonderful, simple images in the here and now
liked the final 'ku, leaves or wind, blowing
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thanks for the read.
damn, these are some old ones lol I barely remember writing them
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Love them
It's nice to read Ku once in awhile, love these images Kyew
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waves crash on rock
erodes to sand
creates the beach
simplicity deserves notice
in the present moment
sometimes still,
the leaves will blow
anyway
priceless! beautiful beautiful beautiful. loved it. simplicity does deserve notice!!!
excellent job with writing this. thoroughly enjoyed the read.
blu
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