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acceptance

 

a major branch is missing
   yes it's true
and in its place there rots
      the stumped remains

grayish bark has formed
   a bold round knot
which slowly seals the rift
      of ancient loss

i can't recall now what
   disfigured me
a violent flash of light
      a sudden gust

or maybe it was some
   unusual frost
that weighed the limb with weight
      too great to hold

perhaps it was the scream
   of stainless teeth
that bit down through the wood
      so long ago

it doesn't matter now
   the rest lives on
a weave of branches sweep the
      phasing heights

each spring new leaves play out
   against the wind
each autumn they drift down
      to join the soil

each summer my full crown
   gleams in the sun
each winter my black shadow
      dreams at rest

and each year sees me stronger
   than the last
growing ever skyward
      from the earth

i grow—the knot is but
   a memory
an old decaying echo
      from before

 

 

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  • Electric Sunrise Moderators member
    April 9, 2007

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    Speechless

    i really, cannot bring myself to praise this poem enough, there is definitely a dark nature to this poem, but in conrast an element of could it be described as twisted beauty? The imagery beautiful, the metaphorical tree aspect, clever and testimony to an intelligent author who thinks before he leaps and a coherent one too. I do believe this is one of the first poems to have left me dumbstruck, a hell of an accomplishment, you deserve the points i bestow upon you, and then some.


    • Zahhar gold member
      April 9, 2007
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      glad you enjoyed, and i appreciate the kind words.

  • Creatress silver member
    March 24, 2007
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    I like to think of this poem as a metaphor for human dysfunction/ damage. To play this out in poetry from the view point of a tree was interesting to read.


  • yourbentangel
    March 17, 2007

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    each spring new leaves play out
    against the wind
    each autumn they drift down
    to join the soil
    This would be my favorite stanza, to me it represents a rebirth if you will. A new beginning and that being alright with the author.
    I found this not as emotionally descriptive as some of your other writes, maybe I am just used to the major detail that you include in each.

    I think the word that I am looking for here is Majestic


  • black kitten22
    March 13, 2007

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    Erin, i agree with kay, this is an wonderful example of personification. You gave life to a simple and often used subject, there is a great gentle flow to it. Very tranquil to read. It isnt as complex as alot of your other poems, but it still works, its very easy to read and has the power to wash over the viewer. Its made me look forward to summer, nice work, well done.

  • Kay Laon Anders
    March 12, 2007

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    A sign with little breath...

    I loved studying personification last year in miss howard's class. I suppose it was my favorite part of studying the different types or forms of poetry you could play with..and I used personification more than anything else...Giving human attributes to sunshine and rivers running up the mountain instead of down..I like this one almost as much as "beads"...A real masterpiece...

    KAY

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