Beyond bitterness, bewildered by blatant betrayal
Examples echo everywhere
Trust taken, tainted
readily robbed... roughly regressive
Appallingly apparent.
Your heart aches
All you have
Lost.
Literally left languishing
Alone apart from
Your hurt,
Alternating feelings between
Rage, resentment and grief
Tortured by your memories
Eventually accepting emotions
Blocking out pain.
Author notes
acrostic
In a list
A contest entry
- Betrayal. by Poetic Aphrodite.
400 points, ended March 14, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I just love alliteration by heygoo.
900 points, ended September 14, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ACROSTICS by Anu-Nataraj.
400 points, ended February 28, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this is sog ood
i dont know what else to say..cozi dno much bout acrostics.this is my first introduction ! -
wow, i really like the way you have written this, i have not seen a mirrored acrostic before but i am new to writting and i must try it.lol, your poem is full of emotion and your use of words to generate this is excellent.
good luck in the contest
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This is a fine work of art here. The alliteration is pleasing. The mirror acrostic is well thought out and the subject is never lost within the device.
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Dang
That really hits a spot. I hope I never feel like this lol. Not again anyways. <3 =]=
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nicely done
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Interesting layout and structure to the poem - a lot of time and effort must have gone into this to get it sounding so good. Great work with the alliteration in the first half.
DancingRed.
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So full of angst. I am used of being betrayed... Well, if you can ever get used to it anyway. I love the alliteration within this piece and the stress on those cutting syllables. That mirrored acrostic also so very wonderfully done. You have a talent for words and expressions, keep it up.
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Thankyou for your entry, Bella
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Clear Picture
You said it all. Very well written. Ray
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How do you do it?
Can't believe the feelings I had as I read this. I actually got lifted to a higher pleasure than was the tendency to go downward. That's the mark of genius. I believe it was "accepting emotions" that got me. I am man: I deny. What a fool.
Please know that you continue to inspire this old coot. And, should you cease to do so, I shall have surely left this earth.
poet
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Powerful stuff poetesse, thought provokingly real. Well done... thankyou for sharing.
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Wow.....again so powerful!!
So much I hear............excellent. -
wow. that was amazing. betrayal captured by needle and thread and stitched into eternity. haunting words. much love.
--Rianna
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Yey!!! way to go. This is Excellent!
Best of luck in the contest
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I love this!!! Acceptional form...top to bottom. You have captured betrayal quite perfectly in this wonderful write. Well Done!!!
Whyitt U xxx
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love this
When one is truely betrayed by a loved one, there is only one other emotion that rival's this pain, and that is the grief of loosing a loved one to death. You could say, they are in and of themselves the same feeling alltogether. You did a very nice job at portraying this.
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kimmyuluv
it was awesome
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