Fear not for I have overcome the world
Just put ALL your trust in me,
I stole back the keys of hell and death
from Satan who is now tormenting thee.
Remember Via Dolorosa
In an Old Jeruselem,
it was there by some of my own
to death I was condemned.
Cato'tail whips with fragments
of metals, glass and bone,
unleashed the fury of their hatred
held for me and me alone.
Blow by blow ripped my flesh
yet I saw only the victory,
light overcoming darkness
waged the greatest battle in history.
A war not of flesh and blood
but in the realm of spirit,
all my sheep will know my voice
and harken when they hear it.
As I carried that rugged cross
to the top of Calvary's hill,
I saw the lame walk, and dumb talk
giving glory to my father's will.
Gashing holes shed healing blood
as they nailed me to that tree,
deaf ears opened, blind eyes see
millions oppressed are now set free.
A crown of thorns thrust deep within
as mockery was their intent,
but I saw only the golden crown
as slowly the cross upward went.
Two thieves on either side of me
one looked over tears in eyes,
pleading"Remember me in your kingdom"
"This day you'll join me in paradise."
The very first act of salvations grace
and yet I'm still alive,
as I later declared "It is finished"
with a mighty thrust a sword did drive.
They thought they'd won the victory
as water from me spilled,
but at that very given moment
earth in it's entirety darkness filled.
Many eyes to truth were opened
as their world began to quake,
torrential tears from heaven poured
revealed in magnitude their grave mistake.
I then went straight to Satan
crushing his neck with mighty foot,
grabbed the keys of hell and death
leaving him defeated in the pit of soot.
But on that third day I rose again
a stone triumphantly rolled away,
the sun broke through with rays of light
giving dawn to a brand new day.
So be of good cheer and fear not I say
on THIS day you too, can overcome,
all your fears, doubts and phobias
armed by word, spirit and love so awesome.
A contest entry
- Inspired by Bible stories.... by nightshade10.
625 points, ended December 19, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Story Poems by Zixaphir.
700 points, ended March 4, 2008, 25 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Beautiful! I love the way you described the amazing way Jesus acted and persisted with love, doing it all so that we can overcome today. The rhyme scheme and structure worked really well to supplement the content. It makes the poem very direct, yet maintaining a sense of elegance and beauty.
And I will just say this stanza in particular rocked me:
"A war not of flesh and blood
but in the realm of spirit,
all my sheep will know my voice
and harken when they hear it."
That is awesome! The rhyme and meter are absolutely perfect there! God has blessed you and it is just beautiful to see you giving Him the glory and returning that gift. May your work continue to give Him praise!
I love this poem!
~G~
P.S. - I just realized I have actually already commented on this...sorry for being silly, lol, but I stick by what I said regardless. This is a fantastic poem, haha -
This was such a refreshing poem! I agree with Rose Angel: thanks for putting it on the feature list. Only He holds the hope that the world is so desperately searching for.
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Thank you dear Toni for putting your poem in the feature list, as we need the story told and retold...as it is the true Easter story..Your biblical account reminds us of His suffering, and His triumphant resurrection...And because He lives, we too shall live that believe in Him!
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A very fine write and most appropriate for this time of year, most ambitious and deftly done poem... bravo!
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I liked your tale. thank you.
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wow, vary good poem!
i like this write alot.....
my favoret lines are .....
"Blow by blow ripped my flesh
yet I saw only the victory,
light overcoming darkness
waged the greatest battle in history.
A war not of flesh and blood
but in the realm of spirit,
all my sheep will know my voice
and harken when they hear it.
As I carried that rugged cross
to the top of Calvary's hill,
I saw the lame walk, and dumb talk
giving glory to my father's will.
Gashing holes shed healing blood
as they nailed me to that tree,
deaf ears opened, blind eyes see
millions oppressed"
keep writing!!
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A beautiful write. I am especially glad I read it this weekend with Easter Sunday tomm. Thank you for the spiritual uplift
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Well put
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Good retelling of the crucifixion with hints of the reason why scattered throughout. Reminds me a bit of "The Passion of the Christ" in the details describing the torture.
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Via Delorosa...Oh, Mighty God thank Him that he beared the cross! This is a precious piece in tribute to the Savior of the world. Faith is strengthen when reading this piece! How magnificent!
John 3:16
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Wow
Awesome, lovely, wonderful...I could go on. Best poem I've read today!
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Excellent
Worthy of the spotlight--excellent job
Stand firm on your faith, it will see you through. Melody -
This poem is so amazing, it touched me so deeply. I thought MY easter poem was good...haha, this rocks 32131242 times more. Amazing job! bless you. With his life Jesus taught us the most important, that happiness is achieved loving inconditionally and living a humble life, smiling at even the 'lowest' of human beings, offering love and forgiveness to whoever seeks it...he showed all his love for the human race and humility at the day of his crucification. Through his words and actions he showed us the road to heaven and therefore to hapiness. I LOVE HIM.
Amazing job and God Bless you!
Michelle
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Worthy of GOLD
Toni, as a Jewish woman, who attended a Catholic school, your brilliant words, touched me so. Your heart is gentle and you have such an unbelievable faith in the Lord, I feel a strong connection to you. After all, Jesus was Jewish, and was betrayed at a Seder dinner. Judiasm, the oldest monotheistic religion in the history of our world, as we know it, didn't accept the preaching of one of their own. He was cast out and belittled.Realistically, if you really think about your words and accept Christ as your Saviour, then you, in essence are Jewish, too. For we are all brothers and sisters, under one God. Brave of you to tell of his terrible travails. I applaud your tenacity and beautiful words. I'm very happy that you won the bronze. I would like you to be my friend. I am NOT afraid at all of the bigoted word of Mr. Barry Hodges! ONe who intimidates, is another Hitler, and Fie! to him. His level of intelligence is nil. Congratulations on a well written verse!
Namaste!
Shana
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Fantastic Poem
Wow Toni you spoke the truth so boldly here, I so admire you for this. You are so brave and full of love for the Lord and for others that you share our Lord with others through your heart and Gods word and the Truth of our Saviour and Lord, Jesus Christ. Thank you for sharing your fabulous gift to write poetry with ME.
Much love always
Kelle Marie
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Such an inspiring poem......I studied it and read the lines over and over until I knew them by heart and created my own that's like a mirror image of this one. Thank you for creating a poem that inspires people.
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great poem
nice i loved the pictures i got in my head nice flow
great work
thank you for sharing your thoughts and poetry with me
keep them coming
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its great what He did for us, isn't it.
this had a very good flow and painted a
great picture in my head of what happened.
nice!
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Wonderful presentation on this page; great background you have picked for this poem. Liked the flow, rhythm, rhyme and message you share with readers in this write. Congrats on taking bronze in this contest.
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Beautiful. thats all i have to say
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very beautiful
This is such a beautiful, and inspiring poem you have written. It is especially appropriate for the Easter season fast approaching.
Congrats on the win!
Ethereal One
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Jerusalem is indeed a sad place. The evil Israeli militarists have occupied it and oppress the poor Palestinians there. But maybe God will revenge himself on them by ensuring that they rot in Hell (the Israelis I mean).
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I love it. I wasn't expecting anything like this to grace my little story contest, probably because I was asking for things dark, but this... this is a shimmering example of a bright candle burning in a dark, amazing cavern, a single star in a the beautiful night sky, completing a perfect moment.
Thank you and good luck!
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oh Toni this is just BEAUTIFUL!!! Every thing about this speaks the truth.Its uplifting and it gives all who reads it...hope!
I adore the background, with the Lord's tender loving face!!! such an wonderful write my friend. I love it love it!!
I'm sure God is pleased!
Mary
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GRACEFULLY AMAZING
when the blood of Christ washes you through that stories strength is more than doubled
thank you for reminding me
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I wouldn't like to be washed in blood, personally.
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Beautiful and Breathtaking
What a increadible write of tribute to our Lord and Saviour and the hope we have in him. In here all truth be told. Done so elegantly I must say. The background of Jesus face and the birds of the air on the top of the page. Unbelievable, I'm pretty speechless for it is such a wonderful write of heart and soul. Thank you for sharing the Lord with me tonight. Blessings Kelle Marie, stavykm
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Such a powerful reminder
I thank you for giving me this to start my day today. I feel the comfort our Savior gives. -
I absolutely love this. Your title is what drew me in to read this, for a few months back I was lucky enough to have come across this most beautiful song, "Via Dolorosa." You tell the story of this most horrific deed of man's many shortcomings and the cruelty they can impose in this most beautiful poem. It is beyond my own comprehension as to how the people could not see who Jesus really was. They knew He had healed the sick, fed the 5,000, made the lame to walk. Who but the Son of God could have performed all these miracles and more? This is a fantastic poem attesting to this fact. Very well done dear poet. Your friend in Poetry, Mysty Rain
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wow, it was an absolute pleasure to read. it was so very wonderfully written, I'm not going to tell you my favourite lines because I think there are so many lines needed that add to the over all effect. Good work
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very long{and huge text}
The meaning behind it didnt speak to me too much... I'm, not to big on religious writings..
this was good though
thanks for entering
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thank you so much for this wonderful entry into the contest to uplift my spirits. i wish you the best of luck in the contest. viyanna rosemarie
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Beautifully Told
Incredibly penned poem all about the truthfullness about Jesus Christ our on and only savior. Beautifully penned is this poem and the visualization is what really made this poem come alive. Very nice work all round and a very blunt yet very well penned poem of Spiritual this is. excellent work and keep up the good work here.
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Wonderful rhythm and rhyme in this poem, great flow and a very meaninful story you share in these lines. Liked the presentation, background, colour and poem all fit together so well. Should do well in the contests I would think.
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Very excellant poem an well written an u have much talent so keep it comeing.
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Nothing left to say. This poem was amazing. I'm agnostic, and loved it. If that means anything. Haha. Very, VERY well done.
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Beautiful.
A truly inspirational write and a joy to read. Much of the poetry I write is Christian, I also wrote something similar to this poem it's called, "A Walk to Remember."
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this was beautiful
loved your words
loved the way your picture in the background added to this amazing poem
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Amazing.
I really needed to read this. I have had a really really bad day and this helped me to see that im not alone. Thank you. This is a beautiful piece. Wow. You are an amazing writer. Easy to connect with. Good job!! -
I don't find this inspiring, the language is fairly simple which is justifiable I suppose due to the pleasantly pieced rhyming scheme... I'm sure if this wasn't religious it wouldn't be in the spotlight....
It narrates fairly well, but it has no breath-taking qualities to be honest. A particularly weak stanza: "I then went straight to satan..." due to the fairly forced rhyme (leaving him in the pit of soot... somehow evoked images of a chimney sweep's existance rather than Hell) - a more effective stanza:
"As I carried that rugged cross
to the top of Calvary's hill,
I saw the lame walk, the dumb talk
giving glory to my father's will." - it carries imagery yet is pieced together very well into the rhyme scheme... "I saw the lame walk, I saw the dumb talk" might still have kept the rhythm a bit sharper but maybe I am reading it wrongly.
This poem is good... Just overrated: whether you agree or not, at least I am being fully honest and constructive.
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BEUTIFULLY WRITTEN
AN EXCELLENT WORK FILLED WITH HOPE AND LOVE -
Extraordinary!!!
This is an extraordinary piece you have written here! Every word is perfect and flows like butter on the page. Wonderful imagery and so uplifting with the true spirit of the Savior. very powerful and a very enjoyable read!
love & light
Debbera
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what a beautiful write you have penned of Our dear Lord and Savior. thank you for sharing this with me. it brought me tears of empathy and smiles of love. thank you. keep writing. God bless you always
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Beautiful!
This was beautifully done; however, I don't particularly like the way you had to change normal sentence structure for the rhyming. It will be a pleasure to meet you one day in Heaven!
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Very beautiful
What a beautiful piece. I loved everything about it. By the look of the comments you have reached many hearts and given many hope in a darkened world. God bless you and keep up the good work.
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Amazing
Wow, what a gift of compassion, empathy and encouragement the Lord has blessed you with. I truly enjoyed reading this piece of work, for the voice was amazingly genuine and loving. The descriptions were vivid and captured the reader, bringing me deeper into the places that Christ walked; the piece also brought up memories of the Passion of the Christ, which definitely worked well in conjunction with the poem. Overall, wonderful poem, definitely a joy to read and some "blessed assurance" that I certainly needed to hear this morning. So thank you very much for your poem, and may the Lord bless you as you continue your writing! ^_^
(Just one suggestion, I'm not sure what spelling you are using, maybe it is a different linguistic variation, but I have always heard the road you are talking about spelled out like "Via Dolorosa". Just a suggestion, though.)
~Gabreon~
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Quill for salvation project
I compare this poem with the success of Passion of Christ, a movie directed by Mel Gibson that rocked and still rocks in the Christian and secular world alike. Reading it, I visualized the entire heartache and crucifixion of our Lord Jesus Christ. I was strengthened. I cried at times. Above all, I was reenergized to love Him more and heed His ways. Great job. However, Was 'harken' the right spelling or was it 'hearken'. Once again, wonderful work done here. Bravo!
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Wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Wow what an amazing thing to say to me!!!! I am deeply moved by your comments!!!Thanks for reading ~~Toni~~
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THis is so good. it tell the story of Jesus and the whole reason He died in the most amazing way. The poem flows so well and has a really clear strong message. I love it.
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Amazing
I envy you. To so elequently put into word what happened to our Risen Lord, is beautiful. I can appreciate the faith that is shown here by this poem. Keep up the work of spreading the Gospel through your poetry.
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Excellent
This is unbelievably beautiful, I totally enjoyed -- sometimes it is hard to overcome our doubts and fear and phobias, but with the dear Lord's help we all can overcome. Thanks for penning such a exhubriant tribute to Our Lord. DJ
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Are you sure you don't want to proof & revise this yourself?
Line 33 thieves mispelled.
Line 44 no apostrophe needed.
A slightly smaller font would do okay.
Any further revision is up to you. The font seems to come up and hit the eyes to hard. Maybe a different style, in black?
Jesus Christ, our Lord, is Risen. Let us be glad and rejoice.
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this was so very true and your picture was beautiful
loved all of this
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This is gorgeous. The title grabbed me and brought me in. Via Delorosa-The Road of sorrows. You described everything so flawlessly and beautifully. The imagery is raw and vivid, highly explicit too. The entire poem is so profound.
Many eyes to truth were opened
as their world began to quake,
torrential tears from heaven poured
revealed in magnitude their grave mistake.
Such an excellent stanza-though every stanza in this poem is. Yet that one really seemed to stand out to me.
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outstanding. also in the word, correct. commend you on one finely written piece.
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Timely & True
The power of the death and resurrection of Jesus Christ impacts all of the world history, and still also my individual life! I was swept along in this piece toward almost a crescendo of climax to the John 16:33-like stanza at the end. God is good, and no event in history descrines this better! -
awe....
Thank you for mentioning this poem, it is wonderful! I love the back round and the poem is very good. So sad it is the truth of it all yet so beautiful, the last stanza really give such hope I love your poem.....So be of good cheer and fear not I say
on THIS day you too, can overcome,
all your fears, doubts and phobias
armed by word, spirit and love so awesome!!!!!
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What can I say. You just have a way. a true poet & a beautiful poem -
wonderful! wonderful! such beauty and rhythm in your words. such glory and honor to Our King! thank you for sharing this most excellent write. keep writing! God bless you always
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Amazing and absolutely wonderful :-D
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wow
very well done!
great testimony
and wonderful imagery! keep it up!
pegleg
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Spirited and Uplifting
Poem. Spoken tru from your heart. Thank you so much for sharing such an Outstanding Peice.
Ephiphany
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My dear friend...
and anyone who could write such a touching and descriptive piece about the Lord is my dear friend. I love this piece. I love rhyming poems that tell Bible stories. This is exquisite! I am happy that it ran into it. God Bless You, Mark
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Beautifully Written
Truth in great imagery. A wonderful testimony to our Lord and Savior Jesus Christ. Keep up the good writing..........Katie
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DIVINE LOVE PORTRAYED SO VIVIDLY!
Spellbound words,portrayed so vividly,brings Jesus nearer than ever before,,His lovely face like a mirror shines right through as I read..How Holy made so lowly,as the cat of nine tails went cross that sacred precious back, and His precious blood was spent.Precious Savior draw us closer more in love with you! For You and you only are LOVE personified so True!
So well his character,visage, and those eyes of love, and His mission are portrayed here,,How we need to see it! Cherish Him...Love like No Other..Trenendous credit to you dear Poet!
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Wow! Beautiful words and of course, story! Jesus is smiling from Heaven on this one. You can touch alot of lives through this!!
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Awesome poem! You captured the Death, burial and ressurrection perfectly. Very inspiring poem!
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Praise God, this is a fantastic write. I enjoyed it so much. I cried for I felt God's spirit within this It is so wonderful how you put a picture of salvaiton into such a faithful painted word. Great job. This is my most favorite one. May I share your link to your poem with the groups I am in. I think this is wonderful for a Good friday to celebrate what Easter is really all about. Wonderful Job. Great work my friend.
Tabitha Robin
God bless you.
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AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
What a superb piece of Heaven you have penned here. I am impressed and honored to read this poetic royalty. It's beautifully done. I'm going to nominate it for the front page, it well deserves the attention!
POETDONTKNOWIT
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Epiphany...
I'm bringing this straight to God...
This is awesome, like you said SPIRIT AND LOVE SO AWESOME!
Lo-Amo
then went straight to Satan
crushing his neck with mighty foot,
grabbed the keys of hell and death
leaving him defeated in the pit of soot.
But on that third day I rose again
a stone triumphantly rolled away,
the sun broke through with rays of light
giving dawn to a brand new day.
They say the pen truly is the art of speech, and you have outdone yourself here!
I say this wins beyond the academy awards, please consider publishing this.
PS God Says so...
You know how to mow & row
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yes It is sad
We have become our own gods..
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'but I saw only the golden crown'. that made me want to cry! very nice. i can tell you put a lot of emotion and passion into this poem. well told. "the way of suffering" is not an easy thing to imagine. i think this is a tremendous attempt at trying to phathom and portray one iota of what it must have been like. fortunately, because of His love, you and i will never have to know how terrible it truly was.
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Wow this is such a moiving piece. I cam fell the fire and passion in the words. I espeicially liked the part about God stealing the keys from Satan and crushing his neck iwith a mighty foot.
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I like the way you decided to tell this story. I like the way that you decided to take the bright side of things, instead of the gruesome pathway. However, what really drew me to read this was your title. Very well chosen. I know a song that uses those words, and it's just as lovely as your poem.
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This is really good. Nice accurate accounting of the crucifiction and ressurection. Well written.
When I first saw this on the featured poems, the title kind of threw me off and made me not want to read it. I'm glad I did.
The third is my favorite. It kind of hurts that Jesus was beaten to death to save me, but I am very grateful for it.
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lovely word choice
I really like your use of words in this piece. I was overwhelmed by the flow. Great work and thanx for sharing the good news!
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the message is awesome. the every other line rhyme worked here. thank you for sharing this with me tonight. viyanna rosemarie
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All Praise Be
Awesome works I love it.Held on to every word I love the lord so this story that has been told many of times is the best I have seen lately but so true.your last line means so much I hope some people can overstand(armed by word, spirit,and love so awsome) Keep writing til your fingers fall off this is the best thank you for sharing I know it has been a while but you have not lost a step.Peace and Blessings Great job
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i am speechless
for me to be at a loss for words is quite an unusual state. may i have permission to print this for my family and people at church--with credit to you of course. this is spectacular. viyanna rosemarie
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Well Done
Hi Toni - What can I say? The flow was great and in order - poetic rhyme dood too - of course the storey is the main reason for wtitting this poem - keep on keeping on - Bless God - Joe
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Joe Thanks for reading!!I am glad you enjoyed it so...and yes the story is the reason to write this but more than that to give glory and honor to the name of Jesus!!!!!
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Quite an inspirational write you have here, just illuminating warmth and light. Wonderful work, warm message embraced already by some I see
. Pleased to see a new post from you and of course another pleasurable read ~Tia
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Tia~ Thanks for stopping by and reading this piece. I appreciate your kind response. I cannot give enough praise to the name of Jesus so I try to express it in my writing!!!Thanks again!!!~toni~
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This really was a good write. I really loved your word-usage. Like an ancient text finally revealed. especially the last part, which you actually said like a billion times to me:
"So be of good cheer and fear not I say
on THIS day you too, can overcome,
all your fears, doubts and phobias
armed by word, spirit and love so awesome"
This actually gave me hope... I thank you for that, it was needed these last couple of days.
The rhymes, the flow, the word usage; everything is so perfect in this poem. It was great, a true masterpiece.
Something to be proud of.
Xx
Broken Soldier
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Excellent
What a thrilling tribute to our Lord and Savior JESUS CHRIST. Excellent workmanship here. Love the topic, love the words. Just a fantastic job. Thanks for sharing this very inspirational poem with us. Luv, Melody
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