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Feelings of a Witch

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 Blistering pain with fire to burn
her saddened eyes drew salty tears
an alluring creature of the night
loving soul they could not discern  

Nothing on earth can now make a turn
hiding within her darkest fears
in this they thought she would see the light
fire to teach and make her learn

The respect of their god they would earn
unable to turn back the years
unable to quell her inner fight
free at last, never to return

Flames seared her flesh, her resolve was firm
the end of her soul as death nears
they are blinded beyond their own sight
in her hair she wore a crown of fern

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Blistering pain with fire to burn
her saddened eyes drew salty tears
an alluring creature of the night
loving soul they could not discern   

Author notes

La’Tuin

The La’Tuin, is a strict formal poetic form that consists of 4-line stanzas with an 'abca, abca' rhyme scheme that is consistent throughout each stanza. Stanzas 2, 3 etc. must all follow the same rhyme sounds as the first stanza. With the first stanza being repeated again at the end of the piece; it contains a minimum of 4 stanzas, with no maximum length limit.

A strict syllable count of 9/8/9/8 is required per stanza.

Explanation of rhyme:

Lines 1, 4, 5, 8, 9, 12, 13, 16 etc., all rhyme - this is the 'A' rhyme.
Lines 2, 6, 10, 14 etc, all rhyme - this is the 'B' rhyme.
Lines 3, 7, 11, 15 etc, all rhyme - this is the 'C' rhyme.

The La'Tuin is named after A'Tuin, a giant turtle from the Diskworld series. A turtle is a symbol of Mother Earth. La is Laura Lamarca's signature; a poetic form created by Laura Lamarca,

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  • Sacrificial Love
    March 16, 2007

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    You eternally leave me

    in amazement of your raw talent...
    your mind never quits working... processing... and thinking...
    I love this about you...
    this is yet again a masterful display of your poetic skills...

    xo
    Heidi


  • mysticstorm gold member
    March 15, 2007

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    Amera,
    This is so wonderful! WOW...I could feel all the sorrow and pain she was enduring at the hands of ignorance. We humans can be horrid creatures. More people have died of years do to lack of understanding or in the name of God. I often wonder how he feels about, did he mean for us to get so crazed to the point of insanity? In his name even worse.
    Perfect form and the meaning is so strong.
    Thank you for sharing your beauty once again.
    Love,
    mystic


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    March 13, 2007

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    This is a beautiful write with great imagery, feel and description. You've used the form extremely well It's nice for me to see someone use it & even nicer that you linked me to it. Only 1 suggestion, the type is a little too large, the stanzas would be neater in 4 complete lines per stanza Well done with this, I hope you place in the contest! Thanks for sharing and I hope you're well. La x


    • Amera gold member
      March 13, 2007
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      Thank you, I forgot about the different screen resolutions. It looked fine on mine. I love your style.


  • Blazing White Wolf
    March 13, 2007

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    this is dark in nature yet written beautifully. This almost feels like a past life or maybe just projecting since I myself had a past life burned as a witch in fact wrote about it too. Either way he images are crisp and stark and the use of the form worked well nice joob! and good luck in the contest

    love and light,
    Blaze


  • blueyez
    March 12, 2007

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    Very dark and very lovely. It reminded me of the days they burnt witches at the stake. It was so descriptive that I felt like I was watching a story unfold. A form I must have a try at.


  • PerVirtuous
    March 12, 2007

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    Absoultely Beautiful...

    This is fantastic. What a difficult form! Beautiful, beautiful images of loneliness and detachment. I can feel the flames and the irony. Ultimate frustration.Three desperately sad bunnies for you.


  • Aeonna
    March 12, 2007

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    sweet

    oh! a new style, i must try.. this poem is too A.W.E.S.O.M.E .. such a pleasure to read your work..
    The Master Poetess

    your friend,
    Black Goddess


  • Anglelost
    March 12, 2007

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    Wow!!!

    This pome is great i have never read anything like this it was really good my fav was
    Nothing on earth can now make a turn
    hiding within her darkest fears
    in this they thought she would see the light
    fire to teach and make her learn.
    its is really good.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    March 12, 2007

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    A most "Bewitching" pen there Amera

    I especially, personal like that last stanza;

    Blistering pain with fire to burn
    her saddened eyes drew salty tears
    an alluring creature of the night
    loving soul they could not discern

    have to try one of these one day

    Dad

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