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Zen Music





whistling wind
through trees
now higher; now lower




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  • Redstormy gold member
    July 27
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    I haven't done Haiku forever, but I still love them. I love this one Kyew.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 26
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    And this Haiku indeed gives a feeling of zen .. there is a serenity about it that is lovely.


    • kyew
      July 26
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      thank you. you've jumped the gun on me! I was supposed to read yours first

      nice to see you appreciate haiku of the non-traditional variety.


  • ixtli
    June 25
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    Beautiful! It portrays so much in so few words. Simple and still definitely gets the point across.


  • Manicmuze
    May 31
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    very good, you give the wind movement and sound on the page, nice
    ~ wendy


  • white stone silver member
    April 30
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    Well put. Good title.


  • teardrop gold member
    April 14
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    This made me smile, seriously!! I didn't expect it to end so quick but it did in a perfect way.

    Thanks for the smile as well as reading my poem "Forget Me Not" and I see what you were trying to convey to me about the syllables and I am taking your suggestion to change the few words around.


    TD
    Again, Thanks!!


  • stompsalot
    November 14, 2007

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    this makes me feel like a warm breeze just lifted my skirt... and i let out a sigh of well, content.
    brilliant work.
    9stomps


  • ErrantHeart
    March 20, 2007

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    ah well, zen, you know, it's for the birds!

    speaking of zen, which I know naught of...or maybe more precisely, speaking of birds, my maple tree sprouted about 20 robins over the winter, yes, yes, it did! I looked out my window and there they were, all budded out and new and heralding spring. whew, finally, what a long winter it's been!

    soooo, I called the tree

    the mating tree
    where each couple pairs off flying
    where I stand alone

    anyway, nature has a way of speaking volumes to our souls. A nice, soft reed(sic) this, wafting gently.

  • Dennis Pickering
    March 18, 2007
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    I can hear the wind.


  • April Renee
    March 12, 2007

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    i like this. the simplicity of it. i like how that sort of contradicts with my ideas of zen...how its easier said than done - of course its probably easier done than said beneath the bs of self awareness.

    suppose we all take notice of the wind without taking notice of the wind...the now higher, now lower could be self. which is kind of nice to think about.

    a comment that makes no sense is better than ten comments that make little sense. atleast i know where i stand - and it aint inbetween!! lol.

    nice stuff. enjoyed.

    blu

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