I never trusted
You
So when you
Offered to
Help
I wondered
What was in it for
You
You answered,
“Nothing,
My dear”
I thought those
Words to be
Untrue
I still
Do
But I will
Trust you
Because I have
No one
Else
You were
Always the
Only one
There for
Me
You were
Always
The one I
Needed
But couldn’t
Trust
A contest entry
- Cynical Writers Welcome! by bw43.
549 points, ended March 13, 2007, 16 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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this is so sad..not to be able to trust someone. It certainly fits the contest category well. I wish you well in the contest.
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thanks
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sara,,u just always capture a single emotion in a single poem great work!
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thanks vivs
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Hmmm. Very sad. It sounds like the speaker in this piece is very hurt. I like the use ot the tiny lines. It creates a form that looks very thin, so it kind of goes with the poem's theme about not trusting... like if it was maybe a thinning line of what was left of trust.
Your last stanza speaks volumes of hurt.... It's just so very sad...
Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.
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eggselente
interesting.. not the greatest poem -
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wow...thanks mikee...
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