a jacket
(that once was yours)
still soaked in the clean scent
of your deoderant, lies crumpled,
a wrinkled cobweb {like collateral}
beneath my twin
mattress
A contest entry
- Anything! by Leance.
300 points, ended April 4, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything goes. by still.she.waits.
600 points, ended April 1, 2008, 113 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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OH wow, thats very cool short but detailed. Creative and unique, its wonderful.
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This is unique, it's subject has been used before, lost love, but never like you portrayed it. Short and sweet, brings back memories, of things exs have left with me, either I didn't want them to forget them or I cherished them as if it were them, great job! Good luck, I love it.
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this one made me smile.
its nice. it like, steps around the sole meaning. like tip toeing so close to blurting it out, but controlling itself. i dont know if that really makes sense. but overall i really liked it. -
Wrinkled cobweb = nice metaphor. Great job.
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Oh my goodness.......
I apologize........
I have not been online due to some medical issues and I completely forgot about this contest. I will have it judged this weekend.
I really feel horrible about this. Please accept my apologies.
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