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Liar On The Operating Table

A strange, yet too familiar noise is ringing through the walls
I find the liar on an operating table
You are screaming curses, yelling things I’d never heard at all
And you shout to me to fix what I am able

With the knife you stuck in my back, I could do the same to you
But the holes that you have punctured are still showing
I’ve got no choice but to help you, there is nothing else to do
You’re the only one I know who’s good at sewing

How I wish this wasn’t fragile, I do not have careful hands
There is obviously no time for relaxing
With the complicating details slipping through my brain like sand
You are angry that your lungs are still collapsing

I don’t want to pick up tools, not even knowing what they’re for
And yet I have to, ‘cause you’re impatiently waiting
You kick and swing at me for things I accidentally tore
I’m not your friend, but a bad surgeon you are hating

By telling me you cared, you know you made this illness start
Out of all the people there, why did you choose me?
What I thought was fused together tight is now falling apart
You say "Be careful, don’t screw up or you will lose me"

It’s hard to do this when you are refusing to keep still
You’re only here because you think that I can fix you
I’m getting dizzy, if you catch me then I very gladly will
But we both know I’ll make it worse if I continue

I have never been to med school, don’t you blame me for this mess
Because you know I cannot fix what I’m not able
You won’t return the favor and you never will confess
That you were lying on the operating table

Author notes

July 16, 2006... I spent four hours straight writing this. A guy I had been with, was also with someone else. He told me to promise to never tell her about our relationship and never to even talk to her. But I was talking to her anyway and gave her little hints about us being together... She got PISSED! She pretty much figured it out and she called the guy and screamed a bitchfit at him! So then he calls me... and he started screaming at me. For the very first time I had EVER heard him mad at me... Being the hopeless dipshit of a little girl I was, I was pretty much devistated by his screaming at me... He was my best friend and I had lost him. He told me he hated me. I asked him what I could do to make the situation better. His response was to tell her we were never involved. To LIE about being so close with each other. Lying is not something I do well. I HATE not being honest and he knew it, but he always told me that honesty fucks you over. He was a liar and he admitted it. I was pretty much begging for him to stay with me... I told him I'd do anything... Then he responed with two words: "Fix it."
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Option 1: betrayal. Like when your friend stabbed you in the back or something.

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  • Forever--x
    October 30, 2007

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    wow, the analogy of him on the operating table and you as a doctor or surgeon or whatever was great. thanks for entering.

  • I love SuperMan
    August 15, 2007

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    wow, this is a kick-ass peom you got here loved it very much! good luck in my contest. =)
    xo
    kandy

  • SatieScully
    June 7, 2007
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    I came back and read this & fell more in love with it. lol. Great job on this.

    It’s hard to do this when you are refusing to keep still
    You’re only here because you think that I can fix you
    I’m getting dizzy, if you catch me then I very gladly will
    But we both know I’ll make it worse if I continue

    ^^ my favorite lines

    Good luck in the contest.

  • SatieScully
    June 7, 2007
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    wow. That's all I have to say. lol. Good luck in the contest.

  • Shadows-stars
    May 11, 2007

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    great write!! excellent imagery and the flow and rhythm are well done.. the metaphore was a bit confusing through the poem and I didn't really pick it up until I read the aurthors notes... however still great wording.. I especially like these lines...
    "How I wish this wasn’t fragile, I do not have careful hands
    There is obviously no time for relaxing
    With the complicating details slipping through my brain like sand"
    well done!!
    thank you for entering my contest and good luck..
    peace and light always..

  • joleahe
    April 21, 2007

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    WOW! incredible poem! great imagery and flow. im amazed you can take an event from your past and put it into a different form. PURE EVIL Too! I loved it. thanx for your entry!

  • Sweetlilskye silver member
    April 19, 2007

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    This was incredible. The amount of intensity and anguish poured into this poem was absolutely incredible. I loved all the imagry and the way things flowed together. Thank you for entering my contest


  • Tears and Raine
    April 16, 2007
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    Well, the summary totally threw me through a loop. It made me wonder, how in the world does that work? But then when I read it thoroughly, I thought, whoa, that's really...just really sad and really painful. Thank you for entering. Good luck.

    ~Raine~

    **Uh, yeah, this deserves applause but I have none...so instead I give you invisible kudos.

  • AngelEyes13
    April 12, 2007

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    Wow. This is very emotional and sad. I'm so sorry you had to go through this. I love the background though and I think this is a wonderful write. Thank you soo much for entering my contest.

  • Piccola gold member
    March 31, 2007
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    I don't see how it fits into any of the categories of the contest. Sorry if Im missing something.

  • TragicLoveStory
    March 26, 2007
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    .:WOW!!!:. Powerful emotion running here...I love the metaphor between you and a doctor....


  • Mainzy
    March 25, 2007

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    Great write, its full of emotion, and raw anger. Good luck in the contest. And dont forget to let me know your option

  • Davy the kidD
    March 19, 2007
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    interesting piece.

    sounds like a horrible time.


  • zydeco
    March 19, 2007

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    incredibly powerful piece. what a story... unfortunately, there are 10 higher quality poems up there. this was fabulously done and screechingly emotive. i stumbled over some of the wording and such, but overall strong, and im becoming redundant. hahaha.

    to sum up (and hopefully get through the comment alive): powerful piece, but not necessarily a strong one.


    you are welcome to enter as many times as you please.


    DS

  • LaurenLightning--x
    March 18, 2007

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    Aww..

    Reading your authors comments makes me sad/angry/confused. WoW. You really know how to pack emotion into a poem!!
    The vocabulary used in the piece is fantastic.
    I love the lines :

    I’ve got no choice but to help you, there is nothing else to do
    You’re the only one I know who’s good at sewing

    The description is amazing as well. Just. Fantastic work. Mhmm. I've run out of all those nice long words to say ^.^

    Thank you for entering and Good Luck!! =]
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