Walk into a room with all the different people
You'll see someone with baggy pants and a stupid hat
You'll probly label them as gangster if the are black
And wangster if there white, But does color really matter?
Walking through a hallway
You'll see the girls wearing their polos
There perfect hair, and tight blue jeans
Prep? I thought that's what you'd say and I was right
In the cafiteria
Sits a little group dressed in black
With Black eye liner, and fringe for their eyes
Emo or goth is thier stereotype
It doesn't matter what you call them
For anyone you might know or see
They aren't a lable that you paste on the wall
They're people who know who they are
Labeling won't change them
It's just something like a status quote
It doesn't mean a thing
~Kailtin W.
Author notes
Stereotypes. wise-child12 Kailtin Wilcox
A contest entry
- Profound Rounds Part II (Finalists of Round 1 only) by Kevan.
395 points, ended March 19, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Short and to the point.. i liked it and i think it is a good write for this contest... best of luck
^_^
~Angel
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Filled with intense reality.
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Originality/Creativity - 9/10 Excellent. You labeled people in this just to show how others would do it. That, in my eye, is creativity
Imagery/message - 8/10 Good imagery. You gave setting and description of the people being stereotyped.
Style/Form - 9/10 Great form and good style... can't see much wrong with it.
Rule following 5/5 ~Every Rule was followed
Flow of poem (If poem does not Rhyme) - 5/5 I really like the wording. It suits this poem well.
Other - 7/10 Spelling was mostly correct, as well as punctuation. You proved your point.
Total mark: 43/50
Overall: Excellent work. Definitely glad you chose the stereotype option. It seems to be one of the more popular ones so I'm glad I put it in. Great work and I hope I see you in the next round!
~Kevan
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