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the farmer's slave

Once upon a timethere was a girl who lived on a farm.
She worked for a cruel man who caused her much harm.

He made her work hard, and he was wicked and rude
He made the girl wear rags, and often work without food.

But the girl never complained, and she did not often cry
Even when she was hurt so much that she felt she would die.

She always dreamed of a better life
She always dreamed of escaping her strife.

While she would rake and plough and cook and clean
While her master was drunk and mean,

She would dream of a prince, who would save the day
A Prince who would come and take her away.


A carriage stopped at the farm one day
And the king asked for the girl's master but he was away.

The king was very angry and he told his guards
To hold the girl in prison until her master paid his debt from the last game of cards.

The girl was grabbed and lifted onto the carriage where she was tied up tight
Tied so she could not get away struggle as she might.

The girl was brought to the castle and locked in a dungeon cell
Locked in with a man who had rotted teeth and a horrid smell.

The poor girl was terrified and she started to cry
Because of her treatment at home all men made her shy.

All the men in the dungeon kept grabbing at her rag dress
And trying to get her to take of her cloths, which just added to her distress.

When the dungeon door banged open all the men scurried away from her
In walked a handsome prince with a cloak lined with fur.

The prince looked around at the men as if they were scum
Than the prince locked eyes with the girl and she felt as if she had been struck dumb.

The prince came over and opened her cell door
And than the prince offered his hand to help the girl off the filthy floor.

"This is no place for a lady; I don't care what you did to be put here"
And as the prince lead the girl out he noticed her start to tear.

The prince brought the girl to the kitchens and he gave her nice food to eat
Some fresh bread with butter, and some cold seasoned meat.

As she ate the food the prince started to fall in love with the girl
And though she was dirty and dressed rags to him she seemed like a precious pearl.

So while he had the ladies in waiting get her clean
He went to his father to ask why he had been so mean.

When the father explained the prince got annoyed.
He said that it was the cruel man who deserved to be destroyed.

The king didn't listen very well; he never did care much for his son
But he said the prince could do what he wanted with the girl if he found her so fun.

The prince left satisfied and returned to the find the girl cleaned and in a new dress
The prince was so struck with love that he immediately took the girl to the king to bless.

As I said before the king did not care much for the boy
And so he did not care much for the prince's obvious joy.

He ignored his son and continued to dine
But when the prince announced that he wished to marry the girl the king choked on his wine.

He told the prince that he was insane and that the girl must have cursed him for sure
For the king could not imagine wanting to marry someone so poor.

He ranted and he raved that the prince should marry someone rich
Than suddenly the king declared that the girl must be a witch!

He ordered her to be burned at once and he rose from his throne
But the prince drew his sword and proved to his father that he was indeed grown.

The prince declared that the girl was under his protection and that the prince would kill
Anyone who bore against his friend any ill will.

He did not excuse his father from this statement and this caused everyone to stare
But the prince found out that he did not care.

He was tired of being brushed aside, and never knowing the love of another.
For when he had been just a baby the prince had lost his mother.

His father had never really cared for the boy, and the servants were just there
And the prince found that he longed for someone to care.

He saw that the girl knew just how it felt
And so he knew that they needed each other, so when he kissed her it seemed he would melt.

Both of them knew that love was needed in their life
And so they stayed together, and that was the end of their strife.

The lived happily ever after, and gave birth to a beautiful princess named Briar rose,
But that is another story as everyone knows.



Author notes

wow, I have NEVER written a poem this long!!! I hope it isn't TOO long for you!

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  • Sandygram silver member
    April 3, 2007

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    Wonderful Story/Poem!!!!!

    Wow!!!!! CONGRATULATIONS on winning the Gold. I can see why, this was a wonderful poem and so deserved to win. Excellent Write!!

    You take care,

    Sandy


  • Whispering Winds
    April 2, 2007

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    I have to admit that I dont care for really long writes. But this write drew me in from the very first. I love reading about love stories, and I really have a thing about Kings, Princess's, and all that... Thank you so much for entering my contest. Sorry it has taken me so long to judge.

    Many blessings,
    Tammy


    • Elvenfairy
      April 3, 2007
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      hey thanks for teh gold! I was pleasently suprised to win the contest! I almost NEVER write long poems because I don't ever have the patience to read them myself. But this one just ended up being long. I am glad you liked it!


  • Denierim
    March 28, 2007

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    Indeed a wonderful, wonderful fairytale. The flow was a bit off sometimes (or it was just me) but it didn't bother too much because the story was beautiful. Who wouldn't want to be saved by a handsome prince?

    Wonderful work


  • sewasham gold member
    March 18, 2007

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    Very nice work, this looks like a winner to me. It's difficult to keep up a good rhyme scheme on a write this long but you did a good job with it. Congratulations on a great piece of writing. Take care and Have fun. Steve

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