Do you love me like you love
Spider-webs and shiny things?
If I lie here just right
And show you my good side,
Will my dead-ness not matter to you?
Because my skin is
Cold and hard, and
White as alabaster- I am a statue-
But you may mold me,
And I shall take a perfect form.
And I am old-
Oh so old.
I do not look it,
But I feel it.
Years of weariness weigh down on me-
I cannot count them
But I feel them.
Do you love me? Do you love me yet?
If the sun is burning out,
Then so am I-
I will be the sun for you,
Damaging you, I will give you
Whatsoever cancer that you please.
But do you love me?
Do you love me?
I will even give you my pills-
The one thing that’s
Keeping the storm at bay.
I will let the storm come-
Let it come!
I am a leaf- to be tossed in the wind-
To be blown- to be forgotten-
To die.
Even death-
Bury me in your mind,
In the silence- the silence!
I will commune with the worms,
With the darkness, with the dirt.
I am dead.
Do you love me?
Do you love me
Like your baubles, like your spells,
Like I love my pills?
Like I love you?
It is the dead-ness, love,
That has blinded me so.
Please tell me what you think
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this is amazing! it really drew me in, i love your imagery and description, it is very effective.
Do you love me
Like your baubles, like your spells,
such amazing lines
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Wow... this was a semi long poem, but it didn't seem to be that long. The flow wound perfectly like a pretty wittle ribbon
but so wicked, and sweet, the words you used to describe things. I loved the second to last stanza bestest 
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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thank ya for the comment on this!!
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Hmmmmmmmmm i think personally you are too young for feelings like this and im sorry you feel this way!
i think you should change the line 'Like you baubles, like your spells' It just seems a bit out of context with the rest of the piece - kind of like it came out of nowhere. And the last line - maybe you could put in something with a bit more bang - something related back to the rest of the poem or your feelings a bit better than 'blindness' - this also seems a bit thrown in as it wasnt mentioned before and isn't related to any other line or feeling in the poem.
I have to say though that this is an amazing write for someone so young
I applaud you young poet and please keep writing!
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I love this. Especially the "I will be the sun for you,
Damaging you, I will give you
Whatsoever cancer that you please."
That's exquisite.
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