Hocus
pocus
plays
strange
tricks
inside
those
minds
lacking
focus.
In a list
A contest entry
- Eloquence in Brevity by RatherImaginative.
1400 points, ended July 31, 2007, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Calling all BEST poems you have!!!!~ by SmartBrick.
320 points, ended May 29, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is a nice poem!I really like how short it is!~
signed confused -
This is a nice poem, and it is about hocus pocus and all, but, it's not spinning a mysterious tale...which is what the theme of my contest is. Would it be possible if you could remove this poem and enter another more appropriate to the theme? I know you can do it!!! Thank you,
Dari xxx -
Haha well yeah I would say that's true actually, strangely enough. Maybe that's what's been happening to my mind recently? Who knows. Depression is it's own hocus pocus if you ask me. Nicely written. Silly and zany.
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Interesting, shows the start of some really nice word play, I reckon more body would add good taste but feel at the moment, its feet are a little rocky.
Much luck -
Ah, I'm loving this piece. It's truly powerful in it's brevity and the quirky way you've set it out - short lines make every word count for more.
Thought-provoking and even the rhyme is quite tolerable - gives a bit of zest for such a small piece, and finishes the poem off well.
Thank you for entering.
DancingRed. -
This reminds me of part of the announcement song 'please make it short and sweet, short and sweet....' As usual, I'd prefer a new poem, but older ones work too. Thanks for contributing!
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Very interesting. Never would have imagined this entry. I like it, though. Definitely unique. Thanks for sharing it and thanks for entering my contest. Best wishes. Take care.
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Brevity is what makes this poem so effective - liked the flow and the message you share in these lines. Congrats on the HM for this write as well.
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Oh, this is so true! But, people believe what they want to believe . . . Wonderful brief write! Thanks so much for entering my contest!
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an interesting idea that works within this piece. the short one worded lines make it read different, but still not lose the overall message of the piece. i like the rhyming of the first 2 and final line, and also the idea in the piece. nicely done and best of luck in the contest <3
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oooo i love this, & its so so true
fabulous -
Awesome!!!! i love how both first and last lines ryhme, was it meant to? I think it was terriffically (go my spelling, lol) done!!!!
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excellent
odd
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really though i like this, it's got your twisted hallmark sense of humor and the pictures all through it just from those few words. i really like this.
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Very good job. flows well, has a point, ten words
ten lines. good job indeed
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See you've still got your mojo working Mrs.
Nice one.
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Oh, how I know the truth of this.
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short and amazing, you could add noting to improve it
good luck in the contest 
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Brilliant
You never cease to amaze me with your talent and imagination. Best of luck in the contest.
Bravo
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