Look into my eyes,
tell me you have no fears.
Look into my soul,
tell me you know not of pain.
After all is said and done,
I will look at you and say,
"take my hand and I will show you the way."
I shall show thee the fire of desire,
I shall show thee the feeling of love.
Then when the time is right,
I will rip it all away.
Fear will rush over your body,
pain and heartache will consume your thoughts.
So now I will ask you again,
do you have the courage,
do you have the valor,
to look me in the eyes,
and say you have no fears,
can you look into my soul,
and say you know not of pain?
Author notes
for the contest 'the crow'
A contest entry
- The Crow by February Moon.
600 points, ended March 13, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This poem is really good i like the worded in it good job keep on writting and i am very interested in reading your poems if you want to take a look at my poems look for me tina12345
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To me this poem seems slightly choppy all the way through. I also feel that you use some words too many times. The poem would be improved if you used different words that have the same to give it some variety. I also feel that the color of font doesn't match the background, and is slightly hard to read, but that does not matter. All in all this is a pretty good poem. Best of luck in my contest, and thank you for entering.
Chelsea
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