Silhouetted
Against
The
Backdrop
Of
A
Setting
Sun:
Electricity
Pylons.
A contest entry
- Quick two--- 10 lines and 10 words by layla..
300 points, ended March 13, 2007, 14 entries
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Comments
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logical but surprising
poet (not infringing on if in anonymous contest),
"Pylons" is a lesson for me after writing a 60 line, multiple parts of speech each, poem. Because, I see imagery in short form for us to start the story or guess what you would've told. The single word verses that can visually look like a couple given at times but syllables makes that difference, they all lend to the quickening but gradual feeling caught with staring at a twilight, it seems. Of course, that's how having a subject followed the rules of the challenge, I gather.
And the last two lines isn't all that reveal it but as conclusion. It appears there's the strangeness of having rays of light by wires, now available by a public servic tower , after day, does show a gateway to yet power, until we think of consequences of cranking it. It is of of such source trying to be recaptured before the turn of the clock so to speak.
So modern goads aren't for the aaaa of all or any really a little, but "backdrop" in many ways though focus has it stand out once in a while, but always interesting is however towards an hour. Songs of strength are about day and rest in night, an insomniac sadly has it said as still to be believed greatly. I take the sterility of the supplies comparatively.
10 words that got me thinking anyway?
~Carolyn
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