Pain
I feel
I could cry
It's not today
It's not the end see
I hate the ending here
I hate it I hate it, *sigh*
But moreso I hate what you did
I hate, you broke me apart again.
You washed away everything that I saved.
A contest entry
- 10 Lines About You (Etheree form) by Lyre-Bird-.
450 points, ended March 14, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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THE PAIN WILL FADE MY FRIEND IT WILL FADE, I KNOW WHEN PEOPLE TELL YOU IT WILL BE OK IT MIGHT NOT SEEM LIKE IT AT THE TIME BUT THEN ONE DAY YOU NOTICE YOUR NOT HURTING NOT SO BAD... GREAT JOB GOOD LUCK IN CONTEST
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Okay
life does get better eventually.. just keep holding your head up high.
Yvonne
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Aww, sister dear. I hate that you have such pain. I know I'm supposed to tell you that everything is alright, but I won't or I am sure you have heard that so many times already. Al I can say is, hang in there and if you ever wish to tlak, let me know. ok?
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thanks brother i really honestly do appreciate it
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a very powerful poem
your use of the word hate is very effective.
great write, i wish you luck in the contest
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