walking the road less travelled
in this mixed up world
of war and famine
questioning if day to day existence
plays out in the battlefield of
Hell on Earth
faith tested minute by minute
planet earth destructing
and i don't want to be in it
wars in foreign lands
children dying
women crying
street wars
drug wars
brothers killing brothers
drug abusing mothers
husbands beating wives
young people take their own lives
considered cool to be depressed
happiness repressed
manipulation games
of criminally insane
escaping sentences of incarceration
witnessing morality evaporation
day to day existence
plays out in the battlefield of
Hell on Earth
faith tested minute by minute
planet earth destructing
and i don't want to be in it
Author notes
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A contest entry
- The Crow by February Moon.
600 points, ended March 13, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Realistic Masterpiece of "Welcome to the world, Mother Fucker!"
This world, what a bust.
And who in the hell thinks its cool to be depressed?
I will gladly give those idiot fake goth fuckers my metaphorical heart & soul and they can go drown on Europa.
anyhell, yeah this humanity deal sucks, but the write is excellent.
-cheers
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This is very edgy. I feel that you expressed your thoughts in a masterful manor. This poem is great, best of luck in my contest, and thank you for entering it.
Chelsea
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Excellent
It is true that we live in a world turned upside down; but the confusion, chaos and violence in this world are the direct result of a corrupted creation, and we are the corruptors. Long ago, a Persian king commissioned his wise men under pain of death to create a saying that was always true in every circumstance. After months of thought and discussion, they came back to the king and presented him with the answer. It is... "And this too shall pass." Eventually, this earth will also pass away and its passing will bring the end of all evil and corruption. Well done.
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this is written extremely well.The explosion of your thought processes is let lose right before the reader.You divorce yourself from the mayhem, tierd of being tested.very ,very well writen.BRAVO!
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"I don't want to be in it", says alot to me...strong words and images here within these words...ones that speak on now...we all try to cover these thoughts up...it was good to read the truth of today..and some yesterdays...nicely done..thanks for sharing
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Hmmm
This reminds me of "Empire" by Queensryche and "Carbon" by VNV Nation.
I really like this. It's simple and blunt and powerful. I love the allusion to Frosts poem and your play on it...or at least that's what I got out of this. It's as if that road less travelled, while taken, is the road that's leading to our self-destruction.
A very thought provoking and excellent write. Wonderful job and best of luck.
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