I remember this
But it all screams “Take it Away”
You need to pay attention
Cause this “Razorblade Romance” tells of what I had to say
In “Joy and Sorrow”
We lick the “Salt from our Wounds”
Can’t you hear it now?
They’re all yelling “She Gonna Break Soon”
“Thanks for the venom”
It still “Cheers for Sweet Revenge” and another dose of “Pain”
With a couple more “Maybe Memories”
We can call it an all for one “Bullet-love Trade”
Well here it is again, another "Honest Mistake “
The "Suicides are Painless" in this "Background of the Morgue”
And words turns to ash as your life becomes
"Broken Hearts on Concrete Floors"
So come on now, I think “You Outta Know”
You rule this “Boulevard of Broken Dreams”
And ever since you “Caught Fire”
I’ve been ripping apart at the seams
Now maybe you should “Commit This to Memory”
Because I’ve turned into the one that’s not adored
But baby this is “For You to Notice’
…..I loved you before you became a myspace Whore
Author notes
In Order
"Take It Away" The Used
Razorbald Romance- Him
Joy and Sorrow- Him
Salt from our Wounds- Him
Shes gonna break soon- Less then jake
Thanks for the venom- mcr
"cheers for sweet revenge" mcr
pain- jimmy eat world
maybe memoires- the used
"bullet love trade"-mcr ( i brought you my bullets you brought me your love)
honset mistake- the bravey
suicides are painless "suicide is painless" manson
background of the morgues "i miss you"- blink 182
broken hearts on concrete floors- dashboard confessional
You outta know-alanis morsett
boulevard of broken dreams- greenday
caught fire- the used
commit this to memroy- (???)
for you to notice- dashboard confessionl
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wow this is really cool! i love how you incorperated all those awesome song titles in your work. i was amazed. i really really love it!!!
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"So come on now, I think “You Outta Know”
You rule this “Boulevard of Broken Dreams”
And ever since you “Caught Fire”
I’ve been ripping apart at the seams
Now maybe you should “Commit This to Memory”
Because I’ve turned into the one that’s not adored
But baby this is “For You to Notice’
…..I loved you before you became a myspace Whore"
SHITTT!!!
YAY all the way my love,, this is spectacular,, aamazing to say the least. wow i am breath taken,, wow i have to read this again..................
"In “Joy and Sorrow”
We lick the “Salt from our Wounds”
Can’t you hear it now?
They’re all yelling “She Gonna Break Soon”
wow oh wow oh wow,,
everything fits together so greatly,, its a mreicale,, shit u did a perfect job,,
i love the choice of songs,, and bands, theres only a one i have heard before,, but i liek the band so yea,, gerat job,, i was gonna add in him,, greenday,, the used,, disterbed, korm, rush and dashboard confessional
but i just couldnt thnk at the time of other bands i liked lol,, but yea wow as i said one two many times this poem is awsoeme,, thank you a million times over,, exactly what i wanted !!!
Three thumbs up for you!1
i cant wait to read more,, i hope t god uve done more like this one,, there amazing!!!!!
good luck and thank you agin
keep it up
Kaydeee -
I like this alot. it's a good poem except all the quotes are distracting. Thanks for the entry.
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I like this lots. Thanks for entering, I was very entertained by your creativeness!
Good luck!
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You were right. This IS creative.
I stayed with ya until the very last line, which was kinda cool because it was very random and I didnt really get it. Theres just some stuff you dont understand in life, and this is probably one of them.
…..I loved you before you became a myspace Whore
That popped up out of nowhere. A punchline that you never saw coming is always the best kind of punchline.
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