Star-crossed best friends finding rhymes
On an out-of-tune acoustic guitar
Watch their august fingers bleed
Forever's all it's been so far
Fretting over spilled milk money
Nightshade needs her beauty sleep
You know a dream is just another
Promise that you’ll never keep
Sometimes when five o’clock comes for you
You can’t destroy a borrowed creation
Standing on the roof
To escape the concrete inundation
Thread barbed wire through a picket fence
Try to rearrange your fate
Play songs other people wrote
Your imagery’s still second-rate
Find sojourn in rain haikus
You’ll never write for summer’s sake
You know forever’s just another
Promise that you’ll never make
Sometimes when five o’clock comes for you
You can’t destroy a borrowed creation
Nightshade sleeps in the garage
To escape the concrete inundation
She says lip gloss is better than heroin
But you watched them smash your guitar on the concrete
She says when five o’clock comes for you
You have to borrow sexy to brave the summer heat
Sometimes when five o’clock comes for you
You can’t destroy a borrowed creation
Slip a knife under her pillow
And leave with the concrete inundation
A contest entry
- Anything Beautiful by Dirty and Broken.
900 points, ended March 24, 2007, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - &&; dirty pretty-- [time to shine, doll.] by animated lies.
600 points, ended May 25, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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"Star-crossed best friends finding rhymes
On an out-of-tune acoustic guitar
Watch their august fingers bleed
Forever's all it's been so far"
"Find sojourn in rain haikus
You’ll never write for summer’s sake
You know forever’s just another
Promise that you’ll never make"
My two favorites.
This is awesome. :]
Too bad its lyrics instead of a poem.
It would make a fabulous one.
Goodluck bbydoll--
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Very interesting. A great mixture of angst, poetry, and music.
Great work, thank you for entering my contest, and good luck! 
Cassie
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inundation? please define
i liked this piece, very much in fact -
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inundation = a flood or a river that over flows onto dry land, OR being overwhelmed by something.
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This has a nice aura about it- it pulled me in and made me want to read on to the end, the words are beautifully written and I think that your word choices really help with the soft daydream-like air around it. Great write- good luck in the contests you've entered!
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Stunning
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wow, this is really greta, i like it a-lot. seriously. my favorite tanzas were:
She says lip gloss is better than heroin
But you watched them smash your guitar on the concrete
She says when five o’clock comes for you
You have to borrow sexy to brave the summer heat
Sometimes when five o’clock comes for you
You can’t destroy a borrowed creation
Slip a knife under her pillow
And leave with the concrete inundation
i dunno, i think that these are the best stanzas of the poem. great job.
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