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Saturday Night

Dance Music yeah, let's face it,

as ad its day I'm finkin,

as in my bed I lay next door to

that club wiv the strobe lights blinkin.

Annoyin repetative base beats
they've gone fuck-in- a-stray,
forced their selves inside my head
in their own malodic way...... 
Boom!- Boom!- Boom!- Boom!
Cigarette- n -a -cup -a -tea!
It's gotta be that DJ 'fuckwit',

Marky Markieeee......?
Spinnin-n-scratchin his 12 inch tunes,

he's on-one major mission
blowin like a hurricane,

destroyin the competition......

I know yeah disco biscuets, got you

in a trance, an all you wanna do is dance.....

.......n-dance-n-dance-n-dance!

But ease up mate, give me a break, 

gotta work to earn a livin...... just

shut-the-fuck-up!......till next weekend

when there'll be no opposition......

cos me and my mates we'll be avin it large

at that club called Contradiction!

Dance music, yeah,  lets face it man,

it's fuck-in-my religeon......!
 

Author notes

This is written in a British type Cockney accent I can spell...........Ha! Ha! The inspiration came one night when neighbours were having a party!!!

Bit Old Skool!!!! I loved the 90's went to loads of outdoor parties......wouldn't have missed it for the world.

Picture: me at Homelands (Winchester) 2003, me in the middle

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  • LaurenLightning--x
    June 25, 2007

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    Ooh!! This is amazing!
    I love it, it really put a smile on my face.
    And the "accent" like typing really does add to the poem, I had to say it outloud to get the full ermm.. let's call it experience :]

    Thank you for entering and good luck!!


    • swanridur
      June 25, 2007
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      thanks for the comment glad you liked....my lady. Yeah saying it out load is great eahh!!!


  • Scrunter
    June 22, 2007

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    This is a great write and read. Truly loved it, especially the way you ended it. That just brought a big phat smile to my face. Good luck in the contest.


  • silverglimmer
    June 14, 2007
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    it reminds me of my friends nights out, good write, it captures a good dirty party..


  • AceOSpades
    April 25, 2007

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    Ok I do have to admire you for the accent and style... I reaaally don't want to hang out with the character you portrayed here at all...hehe what an ass. However there is no rhyme or structure here at all... so it doesn't really belong in my contest. I do like the message and sarcastic edge here though... so you do get some applause


  • Grimlathak
    March 18, 2007

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    Unique

    I love reading something unique on here and you hit that dead on. One of the first things I thought of was the spelling but towards the end I realised it to be intentional as to convey the attitude and devil may care attitude that you parody here with due sacrasm.

    The rudeness and lack of consideration from the "feel good" crowd is well displayed her in a light which I chuckle and agree with you completely. You present the shallow mindedness of full time party lovers very well and I should know for I used to be one myself. Excellent job here. I can appreciate it fuller than most on multiple levels.


    • swanridur
      March 18, 2007

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      Thank you so much for your comment and lovely applause, it's so brilliant when people 'get you'. Because I'm British I wondered if it had by passed the understanding of most people who had viewed 'Saturday Night'. It was fun to write. I to was a party lover in the 90's and had a brill time, I think my terminology is a bit outdated now though!!! It's definately not the same now when looking from the outside in. In fact I feel a bit guilty and humbly apologise for all the people I probably upset way back then. Oh well ho hum!! I like your stuff too and look forward to reading more. SR


      • Grimlathak
        March 18, 2007
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        You're welcome and don't worry, weither we like to admit it or not we all go through such a stage. Some of us never grow out of it lol. I don't think the terminology changed all that much far as the hip hop crowd goes. Sure some new words such as "bling" and "I'd hit dat" (awww now isn't that a romantic compliment?)

        Just throw in the occasional "Uggh!" and "Yeah" "Uggh!" "KnowhatI sayin?" Hehe! I'm sure I've awakened some people back in my days. Although my musical preference was more in the style of 80's rock. Still though the music is different, the partying is all the same.


  • McFairy
    March 15, 2007

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    wow

    I'm flabbergasted, I cant say that I absolutely love it, it does definitely have me intrigued though, it is very original, very very funky and actually extremely artistic, well in my eyes anyway, hope this isn't a huge problem for you every week!!!

    ***Strangeangel***

  • piccola silver member
    March 14, 2007
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    I've never had that problem as we live out in the country and there is no noise except coyotes yipping and the wind howling once in awhile. But you captured what it must be like and made me say, "turn the freakin music down, I need to sleep!" lol

  • oldpoets
    March 14, 2007
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    well done

    This write has a lot of energy. It flowed well and was very fast. You had fun


  • esroddo silver member
    March 13, 2007

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    Super write

    Yes its different but you have an amazing style. You write is fun and happy full of life. Just like if I was there at the Party. thank you for sharing. The title caught my eye. (Lisa)
    "I know, yeah, disco biscuets, got you in a trance
    an-all you wanna do is dance-n-dance-n-dance,
    but ease up mate, give me a break, gotta work to earn a livin.....
    So please, shut up till next weekend when there'll be"


    • swanridur
      March 13, 2007
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      Thank you

      It's so great to hear from people who enjoy what you do. I had fun writing this at 2.00am when I couldn't sleep because of a noisy party! Thanks again for the applause and encouragement SR


  • Naridill
    March 12, 2007

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    Well done! Me like! Very awesomely put. I love the use of your lanuage and I dont think Ive read many poems lately with your style. I love the picture to, it goes well with the poem!!!

    Well done and good luck!!!


    (Good choice for option to )


  • paintitblack1001
    March 12, 2007
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    this really makes you fell like you were there. Great job!

    • swanridur
      March 12, 2007
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      Thank you so much for your applause and appreciation.....SR

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