I’m packing my bags and hitting the roads,
Running away before you cause me to explode.
Through these tears I’ll find my own way,
And I won’t allow you to have the final say.
Call it selfish but this is for the best,
And I’ll be long gone before you can protest.
I love you dearly but you don’t feel the same,
And I’m fed up with being the person for you to blame.
I apologize for everything you feel I’ve done,
But you gave me no other option but to run.
I’m only human and I’ll always make mistakes,
But here with you only causes my heart to ache.
Maybe someday we can talk this through,
Because I want my child to one day get to know you.
But right now it’s best for me to be on my own.
My child needs me and me alone.
You were devastated over the loss of one daughter,
Yet you allowed our relationship to become slaughtered.
I want you to know though that I have forgiven you,
And in the future I hope you forgive me too.
I hear you sleeping and it makes me cry,
To acknowledge this as a heartfelt goodbye.
I hope this allows our hearts and wounds to fully mend,
And you realize this will make us stronger in the end.
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Poetrysangel2041
A contest entry
- The Commenting Community - Something Personal by Frodofan.
425 points, ended March 13, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow. You know, it's funny...it's been nearly 20 years since I ran away from my parent's home, but I still remember all of the feelings you've written about here as if it were yesterday. I wasn't gone for long, thankfully, but in the end it did make a big difference in my relationship with my parents. And 20 years later, they are both my best friends.
I really hope things work out well for you. I admire the forgiving nature and hopefullness you convey in your poem. They are both good tools to help get you through all of life's rough patches.
Wishing you all the best,
~J.
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Very emotional! Greatly written with rhyme and flow. I like the way you start off a little angry, and then move to forgiveness. It is how we should be!
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Wow
This is really something. I hope everything goes well for you, you deserve it. Good luck in the contest.
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Are you really running away?
A powerful piece. With a lot of anger, it seems, at the beginning which sort of begins to fall into a hopeful sadness. You always have that hope. How do you do it?
Missing a word here, "Yet you allowed our relationship become slaughtered."
Thanks for entering.
I hope everything is and will be okay for you.
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Not really running away. I'm not going to live here anymore. There's a friend of Lily's that I've kept in touch with that has offered me the chance to live with her in her apartment with her and her son whom she recently gave birth to, and I'm taking her up on the offer. Eventually I'll tell my mother or somebody where I am but right now I don't want them to know.
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