Fake illusions of the dampen days,
Treading along through lonesome vanity,
As dews of the night [sprawled] within time,
Like each day passes, left in [denial].
Self reputations, rushing in through pain,
Disguised amongst the [neurotic smiles],
That glances upon faces of strangers,
And scorches inside through broken hearts.
Warm droplets taps the ebony surface of my skin,
As the reminiscence of eager pass and present,
Threatens the lifeless image of conspiracy sorrow,
Where no person could help me surpass [this feeling].
Eternal grave seeping into the lake,
My days are only signs of fake narcissism,
Blemished by the hands of the devil,
Trailing along with voices, brawling with echoes.
From what is life, that is from indifference,
That arduous my [demoralised dreams],
Into betraying what has become of me,
And from all the years suffered inside.
Author notes
1st contest: Option 7 =
Why aren't you happy with your life
2nd contest (which is the current one) =
Option 1: Write about a dark, personal experience. I want to feel the pain; I want to be moved by the words that you write. The subject matter isn’t entirely important as long as I can feel the pain and struggle that you went through.
A contest entry
- You have NEVER been sad!!! If you think you've been 'SAD' enter a poem in this contest!! AND I'LL SEE!!! by SilverMoonFeathers.
475 points, ended March 17, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dark, Uplifting, Heartbroken, Whatever. by All u wanted me 2 b.
600 points, ended April 25, 2007, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Awsome keep up the good work and feel free to check out my page anytime!!!
Jess
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This was beautifully painful. Thanks so much for entering the contest.
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It was my pleasure. ^.^
Painful thoughts, lead to painful memories that is hard to erase. =]
Good luck in judging the contest.
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this is a very good poem omg ur dating that joey poet guy? he is like so hot isnt he? u r so lucky lol. well hey u have very good poetry. peace out and wanna be muh friend i have none 0 lol -
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Self reputations, rushing in through pain,
Disguised amongst the [neurotic smiles],
That glances upon faces of strangers,
And scorches inside through broken hearts.
I love this part, your vocabulary is great and Jane as i tell u all the time ur such an awesome writer -
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There's something about this that I shall tell you on IM.
Thank you for your time in reading and commenting. ^.^
And remember what I said about the technique.
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your words amaze .. so much darkness , I feel the pain and sorrow of each line
From what is life, that is from indifference,
That arduous my [demoralised dreams],
Into betraying what has become of me,
And from all the years suffered inside
Best wishes to you
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Asdzaa Nadleehe,
Thank you for your support and for your time in reading and commenting on this piece.
All of the things that has projected within this poem, comes from the inner part of my emotions.
Thanks for the best wishes for me, as I would hope best wishes for you as well.
Have an amazing time and sweet dreams,
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